For the voices unheard (repost)

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Dark Poetry #4

For the voices unheard (repost)

Sir_Vampire
Member

since 2007-06-12

Posts 96
Johannesburg

0 posted 2007-09-20 10:17 AM

You called me dog, you called me wh*re
You kicked me and hit me then threw me out the door
You beat me until I was numb & felt the pain no more
You treat me like mommy even though I’m just four

You called me b*tch you call me sl*t
You beat me more when I argued ‘but’
Beat me until my mouth swelled shut
Your wedding ring my lips did cut

You hit me harder when I started to cry
I curled up tighter just wanting to die
You replaced the tears with a black eye
Blaming me for mommy saying good bye

My body broken, battered black and blue
U walked away once you were through
All I wanted to do was start a anew
All I wanted to do is say I love you…

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

Sir_Vampire
Member

since 2007-06-12

Posts 96
Johannesburg

1 posted 2007-09-20 10:20 AM

posted solely for the enjoyment of Kitheron :-P
i want to see what he has to say about this, every1 is welcome to comment

you watched me bleed you watched me die you watched me not even a bat of your eye

Sekishu
Junior Member

since 2007-09-17

Posts 36

2 posted 2007-09-20 04:10 PM

This poems stirs alot of emotion. Well done.

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

3 posted 2007-09-23 12:29 PM

Kitheron I am not. Yet I still had to respond.

I liked this a lot, sadly it was very visual... sadly if you know what I mean.

Damn good.

Kitherion
Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 181
Johannesburg

4 posted 2007-09-25 01:01 AM

Congratulations Vampy-Poo

(I couldn't resist, sorry...) amazing, for once I even liked the rhyme scheme

And yes, you have just the right combination of poetic justice with correct grammar. Amzing, absolutely Amazing.

"Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..."

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

5 posted 2007-10-25 10:54 AM

Wow got alot out of you right?? Amazing loved it!!!

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