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Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

0 posted 2007-10-01 02:33 AM

I wrote this today on my way back from buying smokes, it's a first draft so it might feel rough but i felt i had to throw it out to you guys.

MISSING

It was a sunny day when I first saw her

In black and white I find it hard that anyone could see her beauty

She adorned every other lamp post like a cheap dancer in a seedy back road strip club

The next time I saw her it was raining hard

I appeared to be the only one that looked at her

Noticed how much she had aged in less than a week

The rain covered her face leaving lines like weathered cowhide left out to rot

Today she was there again

Torn and looking more lost now than ever

Someone who must have been told they were funny had given her a moustache

As I walked on I found her

Laying in the grass with a single tire tread across her face like a scar

This girl I had come to know

To know without ever meeting

Still missing after all this time

Does she grow old like her posters?

Or has she become the girl with a tire mark lying in the grass

Ignored by most

Sadly I doubt I will find out

As her picture fades in the Autumn rains

So too do my chances of passing her in the street one day

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

1 posted 2007-10-02 10:55 PM

Seeker72..hey that was an excellent read...surprise ending. Interesting how it's possible to "fall" for a photo...good job.
moon.

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

2 posted 2007-10-03 02:46 AM

You have the creative edge, I like the way this was written it was intriging.

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

3 posted 2007-10-04 01:01 AM

Thanks guys.

I always feel sad when I see those posters no matter the persons age.

I find it sadder when people think it's funny to draw on them or as I found today alter the wording to make it read something sexual.

I'm not a big fan of humanity when I see stuff like that... guess thats why I'm in the Dark Forum. ;-)

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

4 posted 2007-10-26 04:59 PM

I liked this poem and I have a question for you Was there ever someone in your life that you truely loved went away?? It seems like someone you loved once in your life is now gone. If that happend I'm so sorry.

Seeker72
Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

5 posted 2007-10-26 05:13 PM

We all deal with loss in some form or another.

I have had a few people in my life leave never to see them again or I felt forced to leave myself.

It happens, sadly all too often.

If you want to get an idea of the inside of my head then read LETTING GO... that ones a real trip.

Verg
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 52
Colorado

6 posted 2007-10-26 05:36 PM

how old r u?

Mystress May
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

7 posted 2007-10-26 09:36 PM

You've given me chills.

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

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