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Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

0 posted 2007-08-23 08:50 PM

It lies beyond the stars in space
Through the deepest reaches of memory
At the end of this path henceforth I traced
Lies fortune, hope, and forgotten dreams

This journey is all that eases the pain
Of being lost within oneself
Though I know I search in vain
It's clear my heart knows nothing else

Shackled by reality's wrath
To chase the dream as long as it's there
Running down the endless path
Only to end up at dispair

So onward goes my weary soul
The battle is not nearly won
Sacrificing all to reach my goal
The price I pay to challenge the sun

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

1 posted 2007-08-24 10:14 AM

"Though I know I search in vain
It's clear my heart knows nothing else"

"Running down the endless path
Only to end up at dispair"

These are my favorite lines!! I love this

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

2 posted 2007-08-25 10:53 AM

Thanks, I was a bit wary of this poem at first. But I guess it's okay.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

Tears-of-Sanity
Member

since 2007-09-05

Posts 121
Kingdom Hearts

3 posted 2007-09-24 06:29 AM

nice poem...
I like it...
I especially liked the title, so attracting and meaningful

Tears of Sanity~

jossal
Junior Member

since 2007-09-15

Posts 23

4 posted 2007-09-24 12:24 PM

Very, good a nice meaningful poem!
Go out and challenge the sun!

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

5 posted 2007-09-26 12:52 PM

Great poem full of thoughts but to me it seems to have a haiiden meaning.

Abbeon.

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

6 posted 2007-09-26 07:45 PM

Very esoteric Twilight Warrior, lots of interesting metaphors.
I especially like the last verse;

  "So onward goes my weary soul
   The battle is not nearly won
   Sacrificing all to reach my goal
   The price I pay to challenge the sun"

Obviously you're in touch with your "Muse."

                  moon.

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

7 posted 2007-09-29 10:52 AM

I thank you all for your words and continuing encouragement. And I wish you all the best of luck with your own creations

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

8 posted 2007-09-29 08:10 PM

reminds me of the line:
"the things i chase won't set me free."

good luck on your journey, and though the end may be unreachable, it's not always about where you're headed. it's how you get there.
and sometimes, where you actually end up is more important then where you'd planned to go.

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