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Dark Poetry #4

Im not dead

Sexy_Tator_Tot
Junior Member

since 2007-08-31

Posts 42
Arkansas

0 posted 2007-09-25 11:46 AM

My heart is beating,
Mind is racing,
I know that I'm not dead,

Every feeling,
That I've felt,
Is screaming in my head.

The past is creeping,
Crawling out,
Opening old scars,

Darkening,
Your bright blue sky,
And blotting out the stars.

This taste of fear,
Like sour milk,
Stomach tied in knots,

Though it feels,
Like it's the end,
These are only thoughts.

Scary visions,
Draped in sorrow,
Pouring from your head,

But if you didn't,
Let them go,
They'd probably leave you dead.

Not all moments,
We do live,
Will leave you loving life,

Some will hurt,
And you will bleed,
For love cuts like a knife.

If there's tears,
And if there's pain,
I know that I'm still living,

One day,
I will smile again,
With eyes that seem forgiving.

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

1 posted 2007-09-26 12:43 PM

r a talented writer and if you look back on your poems i bet you can see how much you improve.

Gold star

abbeon.

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

2 posted 2007-09-26 07:38 PM

Nice read and some excellent imagery, well done. Also the poems last word is the key to everything, thanks.
moon.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-09-28 11:29 PM

yes you really do have something amazing I loved it all you really are amazing

Krysti

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

4 posted 2007-09-29 10:50 AM

I like this style if writing alot(probably because I do it) This was a great poem with an excellent ending.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

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