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BrittanyJ
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Come find me?

0 posted 2007-07-22 06:26 PM



Okay, this one isn't the best...but what the heck Here it is...

I can see where you are coming from,
I've been stuck there before.
And i can assure you when times get rough,
I won't walk out the door.

I know how you're feeling, i know it hurts;
But i promise things get better.
Everything will change soon, you'll see;
Nothing lasts forever.

Your walls may be collapsing to the pain,
But i'm fighting by your side.
And if you fail to stand up to the hurt,
I'll be there, next in line.

I'll stand by you, through thick and thin,
Asking one thing in return.
That when it comes my time to fall,
Don't fight back, let me burn.

I'm going down, whether you fight or not;
I don't wanna take you with me.
So don't stand up and take my hand,
'Cause once i'm gone, i'm free.

The pain can't follow me once i fail,
When i take my final turn.
You'll be safe, and i'll be gone;
If you'll only let me burn.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

© Copyright 2007 Brittany Johnson - All Rights Reserved
blue face
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since 2007-06-03
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1 posted 2007-07-23 02:15 PM


Very nice! I can diff feel the rythm
and the flow of it.
hope to read more.

sarah


BrittanyJ
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Come find me?
2 posted 2007-07-23 03:45 PM


Thanks sarah

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

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3 posted 2007-07-23 07:32 PM


nothing lasts forever~ that line something about it woah. I like this a lot
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

flesh mechanic
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since 2007-07-27
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puyallup, wa (the black hole of the states)
4 posted 2007-08-01 12:25 PM


this is a very interesting, its not the average, slightly introverted, but those in my opinion are the best. its true this does have  great rhythem. all around this is a marvelous piece of work.
Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24
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Oregon USA
5 posted 2007-08-03 12:38 PM


Nice poem.

I like to read poems that can associate to a situation in anyones life.

littlefairy
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since 2007-08-06
Posts 51
New York
6 posted 2007-08-07 12:27 PM


I've seen you comment on other peoples works and i've been wanting to see one of yours. I'm very very pleasantly surprised i loved it. I connected so much with what you said. I've felt the same way once before. It was great! -Tara


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