Dark Poetry #4 |
let me burn |
BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Okay, this one isn't the best...but what the heck Here it is... I can see where you are coming from, I've been stuck there before. And i can assure you when times get rough, I won't walk out the door. I know how you're feeling, i know it hurts; But i promise things get better. Everything will change soon, you'll see; Nothing lasts forever. Your walls may be collapsing to the pain, But i'm fighting by your side. And if you fail to stand up to the hurt, I'll be there, next in line. I'll stand by you, through thick and thin, Asking one thing in return. That when it comes my time to fall, Don't fight back, let me burn. I'm going down, whether you fight or not; I don't wanna take you with me. So don't stand up and take my hand, 'Cause once i'm gone, i'm free. The pain can't follow me once i fail, When i take my final turn. You'll be safe, and i'll be gone; If you'll only let me burn. So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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blue face Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 92 |
Very nice! I can diff feel the rythm and the flow of it. hope to read more. sarah |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Thanks sarah So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
nothing lasts forever~ that line something about it woah. I like this a lot hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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flesh mechanic Member
since 2007-07-27
Posts 67puyallup, wa (the black hole of the states) |
this is a very interesting, its not the average, slightly introverted, but those in my opinion are the best. its true this does have great rhythem. all around this is a marvelous piece of work. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Nice poem. I like to read poems that can associate to a situation in anyones life. |
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littlefairy Member
since 2007-08-06
Posts 51New York |
I've seen you comment on other peoples works and i've been wanting to see one of yours. I'm very very pleasantly surprised i loved it. I connected so much with what you said. I've felt the same way once before. It was great! -Tara |
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