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hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2007-05-26 01:31 AM

I keep remembering how it used to be,
how pain and death was all I could see,
I felt the devil's hands grasping at my soul,
with one last tug he gave the final pull,

Then he held it up for all to see,
and said, "now you belong to me."
I couldn't escape the hell in his deal,
I didn't want to believe my soul was in for a steal,

I lay there lifeless waiting for revenge,
I stood as tall as I could for my avenge,
I escaped death by the last round,
laughed at the devil all tied and bound,

So keep on fighting before it's too late,
don't mess with the devil or he'll mess with your fate.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2007-05-26 01:34 AM

ahh i like it! the rhyme was really well structured! awesome.

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

2 posted 2007-05-26 12:23 PM

wow i always like your poems. i havent been on for awhile but thats my favorrite of the ones i have read recently.

Keep on writing.

Abbeon

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

3 posted 2007-06-04 12:15 PM

I really liked the way you began it! it was a fantastic poem!

chunkstar666
New Member

since 2007-06-04

Posts 5

4 posted 2007-06-04 05:29 PM

Simple but with a message that we all need to be reminded of all the time

Twilight Warrior
Member

since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

5 posted 2007-06-30 07:00 PM

Clever words alude me now so i'll just say good poem.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

6 posted 2007-06-30 10:39 PM

Hey hunnie I really loved this! (Made me smile

Haven't been on in awhile I know but I'll check out you're other poems that I've missed...

LotsofLuv
Kira

~Should the truth be so buried
in the endless cemetery of broken dreams?~

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2007-07-05 05:34 PM

awe thank you all so much and Kira you haven't been on for awhile ahh miss you over here

hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

comoloco7
Junior Member

since 2007-09-21

Posts 31
MA

8 posted 2007-09-29 09:04 PM

Its a dark poem laced with glimmers of hope. Its got vengeance and humor, I dont know how you came up with it but its great.

In the blood soaked battle field, bleach the bones of countless millions who in the midst of victory stopped to rest, and resting they died.

silent_one
New Member

since 2007-09-29

Posts 1

9 posted 2007-09-29 09:17 PM

Wow, I love this poem.

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