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Dark Poetry #4

nothing but something

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

0 posted 2007-04-27 09:41 PM

In my mind
I try to find
the thing that I hide.
But I can't,
cuz' I have tp put that to the side.
Until you came into my life.

People say that you know what I'm going through.
But I'll I have to say is, "you don't have a clue."
I've been through Hell,
I've lived in this home that I call my cell.
I wish you knew,
what I've been going through.

skippin' class
shakin' my a**
takin' some pills
havin' some thrills.
Came to the point where I was taking my last breath.
Even though I was still alive,
I still got to see my own death.

[This message has been edited by cherrys_rule (04-29-2007 09:19 AM).]

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

1 posted 2007-04-29 09:21 AM

This might not make since but hey it makes perfectly since to me. tell me what you think, but be nice

Cheechako
Junior Member

since 2007-04-28

Posts 21
Texas

2 posted 2007-04-29 07:48 PM

Hi, Cherrys-rule,
I think if you write what others tell you how to write, then you have done everyone a disservice. What you have put into words makes sense to you. If we cannot see the message, we have failed, not you. This is a dark emtoion, describing a dark time in your life, but the magical thing is that you get to see the end of it.
So, (my words) now you can move on to something more positive. As dark as it is, I liked it, and I can put this, as a stencil, over parts of my life, and it it a perfect fit.
Cheechao

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

3 posted 2007-05-01 08:47 PM

Thanks for your comment. I hope everyone else that reads this gets the same feeling what you had. thanks for reading this ase well.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2007-05-04 12:59 PM

Came to the point where I was taking my last breath.
Even though I was still alive,
I still got to see my own death.~

Wow I got that feeling this was amazing. so deep... hope to read more soon.
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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