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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
My grave is here in the freezing snow This life of mine is ending that I know I walked so many miles in search of spring Now my life is ending here by this frozen stream My grave is here in the freezing snow I can feel the chill in the wind that blows No one will miss me for I left no one behind Wish I could turn back the clock and rewind My grave is here in the freezing snow I can no longer feel my fingers and toes Let the darkness swallow me whole Just another life that winter stole... ~It's sooo cold outside! I'm in the wintery cold poems swing I guess. Can't wait for Spring~ |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Spring, as well I can't wait. I liked this wintery poem, melancholy, yes but nevertheless great... luv, hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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Twilight Warrior Member
since 2007-02-22
Posts 106The World That Never Was |
I like the feeling of solitude. Cheers |
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Grand_Daddy_Tale_Spinner New Member
since 2007-02-23
Posts 6 |
I like the embrace of passion in this piece. Well spoken, few minor mechanical errors but a good read none the less. |
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chiLanta Junior Member
since 2006-12-01
Posts 47 |
i cant wait till spring either winter stinks and i cant take the cold either, your poem sounds like me when i get in my car in the moring to go to work! good write |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Hey there's peoplez's! Thank you for the comments! |
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L. Ottanio Junior Member
since 2007-04-17
Posts 27Connecticut, USA |
kira - this is a great poem - real deep meanings for me. but you might want to consider (once again only an opinion) - the last stanza yours reads: My grave is here in the freezing snow I can no longer feel my fingers and toes Let the darkness swallow me whole Just another life that winter stole... 3rd line c/b let the darkness swallow me up whole 4th line c/b and I'll e just another life taht winter has stole. |
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