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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Every step I hear coming down the hall Every time I hear that I have a phone call I can’t help but to think for a moment that it might be you Only to have the allusion shattered after a precious few Tell me dearest, why it is I still look for you’re face? Knowing full well that you’ve already finished this earthly race I tell myself that you’re no longer here But my heart keeps telling me that you’re somewhere near For you seem so close for being so out of reach So close for being past the barrier that death can only breach I feel you haunting me in the darkest of nights I feel you haunting me in the crisp morning bright A memory is perhaps now all you are But I stand here now with all you’re scars One day I know I’ll meet you again But you’ll continue haunting me until then |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow Kira I haven't seen you here for a long time, it's good to see you back. I Haven't been around much anymore but... I liked this poem it seems I don't know like reality... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
loss is so poignant...I could tell,but not as well as you have...Good write!! Click |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Thankyou much hunnie! (I've totally missed you!) I hope to see some more poems from you since you are my fav poet! Thanks much for commenting!!! Hugs and Hershey bars!! Luv Kira |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Thanx click1 for reading my poem! I love getting comments even if I get just one or two! (I'm not a pro when it comes to writing poems so I like to know what people think and how I can improve for future poems) Lots of Hugs and Hershey bars!! Luv Kira |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
haha i wish I could post poems haha I have the worst case of writers block in the world haha ok so i exaggerated a bit wow how do you spell that word anyway... hunnie ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
I'm there with you hunnie! I've caught the dreaded writers block and can't for the life of me come up with anything at all... Except for this I have no insperation whatsoever!!! (How do you get rid of wb? Is there a pill you can take for it or something?) And yes you spelled "exaggerated" corectley. Luv ya lots hunnie!!!!!! Kira |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
haha if there was a pill for wb I really would need it hmm if there was do you think if you took the whole bottle you could die of OD? hehe... luvs ya, hunnie ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
bereavement-it never gets any easier-you just get better at dealing with it arthur |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
True, true. ~Should the truth be so buried |
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L. Ottanio Junior Member
since 2007-04-17
Posts 27Connecticut, USA |
hi kira - i'm new here... the name is lynn. I read your poem and thought I might be able to help you with it... first off - my pet peeve is typos - so i most definately will point them out - and explain how to fix them... well lets start there.. Every step I hear coming down the hall Every time I hear that I have a phone call I can’t help but to think for a moment that it might be you Only to have the (illusion) allusion shattered after a precious few Tell me dearest, why it is I still look for (s/b your) you’re face? Knowing full well that you’ve already finished this earthly race I tell myself that you’re no longer here But my heart keeps telling me that you’re somewhere near For you seem so close for being so out of reach So close for being past the barrier that death can only breach I feel you haunting me in the darkest of nights I feel you haunting me in the crisp morning bright (light) A memory is perhaps now all you are But I stand here now with all (s/b your) you’re scars One day I know I’ll meet you again But you’ll continue haunting me until then (last 2 sentences could read: (just my opinion) One day I know we'll meet again but need you haunt my life till then |
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