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eor
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0 posted 2003-11-24 01:19 PM



Life Misunderstood

To understand misunderstanding
You must forget all you know
Nothing makes sense anymore
Not even green lights or stop signs
Language is not what it used to be
Where's my muse?
Where's my light?
Where's my knight in shining armor?
Where's the love of my life?
Where's my solace?
Lost in a never ending sheet of letters,
All jumbled, not making sense,
Forming unknown words to the minds eye
Never to be the same
Or always to be the same
Coffee or tea, white or black, stop or go,
Stay away, come near, don't speak, never stop,
Love me, hate me, rape me, date me, kill me, mourn me,
Misunderstood the point?
Slice me, dice me, wife me, leave me,
Cold, confused, stuffy, wet,
Don't let me drown in my misery,
Or float on despair,
I want to soar in happiness,
Door closed,
Misunderstood.

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

© Copyright 2003 matt cockrell - All Rights Reserved
Sparticus
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1 posted 2003-11-24 01:48 PM


Very interesting and well thought out poem, the images made this reader feel the questions asked.


Sparticus.

Even with insects-
some can sing
some can't

-Issa

eor
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2 posted 2003-11-24 02:39 PM


thanks again, i try to make the reader think a little...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Mad_Hatter
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3 posted 2003-11-24 04:07 PM


That ^ is always a good thing, the struggle for happiness is never an easy one.  This poem a feel of desperation to it and it's a great write.
cosmic-duality
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4 posted 2003-11-24 05:33 PM


love gain, love lost, these themes come throuh very well. Nicely done    
green_itchy_stuff
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5 posted 2003-11-25 11:39 AM


Good poem.  

GIS

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

River
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6 posted 2003-11-25 03:38 PM


I really like this eor...in a way i think i needed to read it. i wrote something called "misunderstood" that was about the world not understanding me. i like how you look at it. it's not us that are misunderstood, it's us that misunderstand the world...not understand life.

                  - River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

mysticpoe
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7 posted 2003-12-11 09:08 AM


eor, how did I miss this one?

To understand misunderstanding
You must forget all you know
Nothing makes sense anymore
Not even green lights or stop signs
Language is not what it used to be
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Unbelievable lines, Nothing makes sense anymore-not even green lights or stop signs. The directness is outstanding
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Where's my muse?
Where's my light?
Where's my knight in shining armor?
Where's the love of my life?
Where's my solace?
Lost in a never ending sheet of letters,

Great intensity!

All jumbled, not making sense,
Forming unknown words to the minds eye
Never to be the same
Or always to be the same
Coffee or tea, white or black, stop or go,
Stay away, come near, don't speak, never stop,
Love me, hate me, rape me, date me, kill me, mourn me,
Misunderstood the point?
Slice me, dice me, wife me, leave me,
Cold, confused, stuffy, wet,
Don't let me drown in my misery,
Or float on despair,
I want to soar in happiness,
Door closed,
Misunderstood.

"So"


When read at a fast pace. The emotion is all over you. I don't know how I missed this?
you're back my man.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

cusick
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8 posted 2003-12-11 04:15 PM


I felt that there was a lot of anger in in this intrguing poem which made it a very good read. Maggie
green_itchy_stuff
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9 posted 2003-12-11 06:54 PM


I just wanted to read again and again I liked this as much as I would like being understood and understanding.

GIS

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

eor
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10 posted 2003-12-11 08:54 PM


poe- when i saw this one up there i was like 'woah' a blast from the past, its been a while since i have seen this piece, but thanks for reading, it is pretty intense, but that is the nature of the poem, you hit it dead on wiht the fast reading that is excatly how it is supposed to be read...thanks

maggie-thanks for reading

greeny-as always thanks

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Necro Draconis
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11 posted 2003-12-16 03:40 PM


One I can relate to. Very interesting!

If this is reality, I want out.

eor
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12 posted 2003-12-16 08:17 PM


thanks you!

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

passing shadows
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13 posted 2004-05-17 04:20 AM


sounds like me
eor
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14 posted 2004-05-20 09:56 AM



mysticpoe
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15 posted 2005-03-17 07:37 PM


yeah man, we're you been......
littlewing
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16 posted 2005-03-18 09:09 PM


yea, where have YOU been?

*smile*

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17 posted 2012-05-20 08:22 PM


where have i been you are all such an inspiration

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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