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Dark Poetry #4

going crazy

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2006-11-26 10:41 PM

when she's happy she feels like living,
but after all this time she's stopped giving,
when she's sad she feels like dying,
she feels sick of trying,
she can't remember the last time she didn't cry,
as she lets out another deep sigh,
she can't help but feel like this,
she can't see happy, it's something she'd miss,
she hopes to stop thinking suicidal thought soon,
it makes her feel out of tune,
she doesn't think life's fighting fair,
because it seems no ones ever there,
she'd love to run away somewhere new,
but if she came back she'd have too much explaining to do,
so she'll stay here and live in misery and pain,
one step closer to going insane.

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2006-11-30 01:59 PM

too many Shes

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

2 posted 2006-12-01 11:36 PM

I thought it was good, much better at ryming than i could do. thanks -Abbeon

mechanical_animal
New Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 7

3 posted 2006-12-03 03:04 AM

this is a good poem. it flows decently but there are a lot of shes in there. that is the only thing i didnt like about it, but its still a really good poem overall.

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