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Dark Poetry #4

Self seeking

secret_truth_lies
Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 74

0 posted 2006-11-14 10:02 PM

tears,
falling down my cheek
fears,
that's all I seek
nightmares,
please go away
memories,
that's all I want to stay
I
don't need you
then again,
I don't know what to do
Something
is holding me back
You
are what I lack.

(Hopefully I will be adding on, but until then tell me what you guys think about it.)

secret_truth_lies
Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 74

1 posted 2006-11-18 05:07 PM

tell me what you think so far.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-11-18 10:04 PM

WELCOME TO PIP!!

i thought this was an equally good post i don't know what but i think it could use something... well hope to read more soon...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

trUstNooNe
Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 91

3 posted 2006-11-20 08:56 AM

i really enjoyed this..like the way you played the words..cant wait to read it after you add on,deff looking forward to it~

secret_truth_lies
Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 74

4 posted 2006-11-23 10:59 AM

I wont be able to add on till I get it back from my teacher. We have this contest thing for our school and this one had got picked. i'm so excited. I can't wait till the results come back with my poem.

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

5 posted 2007-04-24 08:18 PM

man i love this poem. you did an amazing job on this. i hope you have found the man that had you all along.

mged
Junior Member

since 2007-03-29

Posts 39
ND

6 posted 2007-04-25 04:05 PM

This was good. I liked it but you sould add on. If you did it would make it outstanding.

KEEP ON

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