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Welcome to hell |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
give me your hand, let me show you, the one and only misery for two, give me your very soul, i'll introduce you to my hell, but you have to promise you won't tell, i will take you slowly, and i'll get you soon enough. getting your soul back will probe to be tough, you will think suicidal thoughts, and what it's liker to be dead, your wrists will be used to the red, i'm not going to give you up, or put you on the right track, and i'll tell you now there's no turning back, so have you guessed yet who i am? or how much power i hold? you don't know much only what you were told, i'll give you a hint who you're dealing with, so here is my confession, welcome to depression. A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Wow! You're always knocking me off my feet hunnie! (This was sooooooooooo awesome!) I can't tell you how much I relate to this poem. (You took the words right out of my mouth!) Another incredible job honey! This is going in my favs! Lots of Hugs and Hershey bars! ~Kira |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hmm... I guess reading this reminds me a lot of "alone in the dark"'s poem welcome to hell, but in a different sort of way? The starts are kind of the same... Didn't think it was one of your best poems ever but it's a hard subject to run with. Thanks for sharing  "I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->--- |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
well i looked back on that poem and yes i agree it does sound a lot like it maybe that is what inspired me to write a poem from this point of view but also there is this other poem that it was like too, i acually didn't realize it was that similar although it was about different things... but thanx for replying Kira and Rhia. hunnie A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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Shake Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 40 |
Wow,I have to say,that was really good...... The rhyme scheme was unusual,but good,I liked this alot~ SHAKE |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
 thanks for your reply Shake...hunnie A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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Abbeon Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 228Curiousity, and wonder |
wow thats good, i've been down that road alot. but its only recantly i started writting it out. love your stle in writting, to me your poems are so diffrent from my style there a refreshinng read. Thanks -Abbeon |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Abbeon thank you for replying... hunnie A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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youngfirefly Junior Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 12 |
This is a good poem because it gives the reader an idea of what depression feels like. |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
Life is not always "peachy", and your poem does a good job on reflecting that. I liked you flow. Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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mechanical_animal New Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 7 |
i really liked this one. probably my favorite of yours so far. i loved the flow and rhyme scheme. great work. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
thank you all, i acually wrote this awhile ago and never really thought this many people would reply but thanks you... i wrote this poem so people could kinda see what it is like... hunnie A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
i know him well you have to fight and -it helps to write arthur |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
thanxs |
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Russell8624 Member
since 2006-11-28
Posts 99Minnesota |
HOLY BAD POEM BATMAN |
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carolinabeen Member
since 2006-12-12
Posts 69 |
and this goes on have to say and on shattered liveliness within chatter loving so this is it |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
good liked it arthur lucifer before the sun rise |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
HOLY BAD POEM BATMAN ummmm hmm oss of words but anyway thanx everyone for repliying hunnie |
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Tee Junior Member
since 2006-12-20
Posts 26Belgium |
Amazing hunnie, realy. Love this one. |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
I'm uh, kinda at a loss for words...sooo familiar, same title and all. I knew I had neighbors, but didn't know I had a room mate at the same adress! Welcome! Seriously though, good poem. *^*Angel*^* |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Liked this my kinda poem but you know that. Put me in mind of those guys that break mind control victims like deprogramming cultists and the like. Maybe i'm wrong i'm definately not normal. So won't you sing me a rainbow Josie roll me a song |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Thanxs. Yes, Alone in the dark, it is similar to your poem, i couldn't really think of a title so by the time i realized that it had the same one, it was too late to change it... hmmm thanxs for your reply though... hunnie ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
Well done,I've felt like I am standing on my own kneck at times....a monkey with a name??? Click |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
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mged Junior Member
since 2007-03-29
Posts 39ND |
At frist I thought that it was well dumb. As I read it I was able to relate to it more than ever. THIS IS VERY GOOD. KEEP ON I WANT TO READ MORE. |
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