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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! 
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you dont speak your thoughts instead you keep them deep insde tucked away in a far off place somewhere safe to hide the sadness in your eyes tell me you dont know what to do you dont have to tell me your bruises speak for you his frustration mounts and your his solution you just tell yourself that the pain is an illusion lips cut and swollen with a steady trickle of blood these sedatives arnt working i can tell your coming undone close your eyes tight soon it will all be over just sleep sound tonight under the safty of the covers |
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lanaia74 Member
since 2006-08-25
Posts 67 |
VERY well done! |
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deceitful_siren Junior Member
since 2006-09-14
Posts 20USA |
Oh, I love this one. Very depressing, yet still elegant in a way. Absolutely amazing job. Please continue. |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
The opening stanza in your poem is very strong, paints such a clear picture of the person you're writing about and set the tone of the poem so well. "you dont speak your thoughts instead you keep them deep insde tucked away in a far off place somewhere safe to hide" And then you enhance that description with these very moving lines" "you dont have to tell me your bruises speak for you" A difficult topic to write about but you've handled it very well. Nice work! |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i miss reading your poetry in teen poetry so i had to drag my butt all the way over here just to read your poems and i'm glad i did good poem i loved... hunnie*  A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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