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Dark Poetry #4

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JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

0 posted 2006-09-14 02:29 PM

Clothed in the orchid slip of a child
those sun suited years
when time fell from chalk bells,
and chimed the conviction
the sky was as vast and as pure
as the translucent
organza of her innocence.

The sky descended,
metamorphosed into chipped Dresden
tossed into the dustbin
that whispered don't tell.

Crushed bones of deaf ears
peeled skin from the heart
in thin ruby tendrils
of abandonment
as the pure orchid light
fragmented into surreal
films of detachment.

[This message has been edited by JenniferMaxwell (09-14-2006 03:37 PM).]

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-09-14 02:41 PM

Hi JennniferMaxwell,

Welcome to passions! I'm so honored to be the first to welcome/post on this poem

"The sky descended,
metamorphosed into chipped Dresden
tossed into the dustbin
that whispered don't tell."

My favorite^^ Especially the part about chipped Dresden, kind of a sad thought...But a wonderful poem nevertheless!

I loved your use of words, complex, yet, not hard to understand, if you know what I mean...

Thanks for sharing, I hope to see more of your posts in the near future!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

2 posted 2006-10-09 07:11 PM

I thought this was a very good poem. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanks for sharing.

lil cherry
Member

since 2002-10-02

Posts 86
Ont, Can.

3 posted 2006-10-11 09:16 PM

beautiful poem. fantastic use of language and diction.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2006-10-12 12:29 PM

Very poignant.

quote:
The sky descended,
metamorphosed into chipped Dresden
tossed into the dustbin
that whispered don't tell.

A fantastic first post and welcome to Passions, you will enjoy the poets here I am sure.

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