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Dark Poetry #4

Cruel Joke

sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28

Posts 209
London, UK

0 posted 2006-09-14 06:49 AM

CRUEL JOKE:

Always together when you are alone
Fate's cruel joke of icy water thrown
Everyone always loving and loved
But myself seeming always rejected and judged
By the being of me and the expression of mine
My life, my fate, always resigned

Sylvia 17/08/06

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-09-17 01:48 AM

Hi sgreybe,

I really liked this poem! I'm not sure why no one has posted a reply on it yet, but I feel honored to be the first

"My life, my fate, always resigned"

This part^^ I feel like you captured the emotion/attitude just right, it FEELS resigned, not just saying it but actually getting the emotions across to the reader. I liked that about this poem, how it was able to show the emotions to the reader.

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

2 posted 2006-10-09 07:13 PM

Man this was a great poem. I love your work. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanx for sharing.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-10-12 11:37 AM

awesome poem

hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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