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Dark Poetry #4

In That Akward Pause

Tempest
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since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
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0 posted 2006-09-04 08:36 PM

Im wondering
If im a lost cause
I can tell that i am
In that akward pause

Am I worth anything
Am I worth shedding a tear
Im lost in a unfair world
Where Im living my fears

I realised my worth
When I passed you by
You didnt even look up
As I said hi

I know now
That im a lost cause
Hoping for a friend
In that akward pause

This is the only life you have, so live it to be remembered

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

1 posted 2006-09-04 09:35 PM

"Am I worth anything
Am I worth shedding a tear
Im lost in a unfair world
Where Im living my fears"

I actually like this part in your poem. But I have to tell you something you are worth something. Probably not to that person, but to another person that's more special.

But you did an awasome job on this poem. I hope to see more from you Temptest.

~Courtney~

lanaia74
Member

since 2006-08-25

Posts 67

2 posted 2006-09-09 08:03 AM

A few misspelled words, but overall very well done!

ILoveTheRain
Member

since 2008-03-02

Posts 157
GA

3 posted 2008-03-03 09:53 PM

I really, truely enjoyed this. It tells a story that is so important to a lot of people.
Well done.
Jessica

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