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lace_of_light
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since 2006-08-02
Posts 44


0 posted 2006-08-03 02:47 AM



So calm and gray
We've wasted our time, day after day
And we'll end our time together
In a hail of bullets, forever
I've watched you sleep
And your secrets I'd keep
So drab and dull
Our voices now are a toneless lull
Quietly we lay side by side
Taking each of our breaths in stride
I can't feel your warm skin
All I know is that the cold seeps slowly in
Death touches my pale face
Chalk outlines with grace you trace
And I hear you sigh
And I see tears fall from your eyes
We're nothing but figures of blood
Made from bricks and mud
Constructed just to be destroyed
It's our obligation for we are employeed
You understand my plight
As we close our minds and sleep at night
I'm weary and torn
And you're weathered and worn
My sickness is growing deep within me
I slice through my life and break free
But in threes they die
Never one or more shy
My lifelessness touches you
And then our time is through
As we lay next to each other
With the dirt as our cover
And the rock as our headboard
And the wood as our place stored
All I feel is cold
Within every ripple and fold
Of my black dress
And I must confess
I've never seen a corpse so lovely
Than you, as you lay divinely
Cold
Breathless
And lovely
Beside me

"areyouinorareyouout? eitherwayyoucan'twin." he said. "butthefallwillbefantasticandwhat'sleftisnothinglessthanperfection"

Silver and Cold

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Digital_Hell
Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202
Amidst black roses
1 posted 2006-08-03 03:10 AM


again i am stunned by the poem. it is absolutely brilliant! I enjoy your writing so much. its funny how close some of our poems are to one another and how they share emotions,feelings and ideas. It is alarmingly good! Keep up the amazing work!!!

i loved these lines

"And we'll end our time together
In a hail of bullets, forever"

How many times i have wished for an end like this

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

rockbabe
Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105

2 posted 2006-08-03 04:08 AM


Astonishing....... very well written.
Will be on the look for more of your work!

greysolace
Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71

3 posted 2006-08-04 03:09 AM


your work...i dont know how to say it, but it is full of so much. the words and phrases you use paint a stunning portrait of two in the embrace of death. i can feel them and their thoughts...oh yeah, you gotta keep writin.

~~Poetry is written emotion~~
greysolace
amaya the phoenix

Decriel
Junior Member
since 2006-08-08
Posts 27

4 posted 2006-08-10 03:13 PM


I am honestl at a loss for words... Brilliant is a BIG understatement

Sorrow
Member
since 2006-06-14
Posts 83
Ireland
5 posted 2006-08-10 03:25 PM


Beautiful imagery and an effortless flow! This is an excellent piece!
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