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Philmont
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since 2004-01-10

Posts 61

0 posted 2006-07-23 01:59 AM

I once saw an ambassidor standing before
a building, holding aloft a sign proclaiming
God the mastermind behind 9/11.

And he was right, because everything that
goes wrong in the world is God's doing
and everything that goes right in the world
is a fluke of nature, an abomination, a mutation,
a choice selection made by an uncaring cosmos.

I was tempted to wave at the ambassidor
but when I saw his friend carrying a sign
proclaiming that God hates homosexuals,
I was unduly shamed

zigwield
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 61

1 posted 2006-07-23 05:47 AM

Nice poem

It is true that God is the beginning and the end of all things.
He is above all of us.
But i believe even God has some sense of humor.

the quell
Member

since 2006-07-19

Posts 144
Liverpool, UK

2 posted 2006-07-23 04:09 PM

I really enjoyed this piece. I think it was a good political and spiritual message, and dealt with some very interesting ideas. It was thought-provoking; and very well written.

Where black, bleeding roses await the Thirteen,
I see not the stars, but the darkness between

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2006-07-24 10:44 PM

Philmont, What does the title of the poem mean? It sounds interesting.

God bless,
In Christ,
-Craig

To wrestle is to live; to fight is to love.

trUstNooNe
Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 91

4 posted 2006-07-24 11:09 PM

nice write...God does control everything the good and the bad....

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-07-25 04:30 PM

Hey philmont,

Interesting write, I'm not sure I agree with your views on God, but to each their own...

I think you did an excellent job with setup, form, flow, wording, etc...

I especially liked the ending part about the homosexuals, it kind of made me laugh, no offence if that wasn't your idea behind the poem...

Yes, what DOES the title mean? I'd like to know also.

Thanks for sharing

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kif kif
Member

since 2006-06-01

Posts 439
BCN

6 posted 2006-07-29 10:17 AM

Hello-I notice you have a distinctive style that uses enjambments...I admire that strength.

One thing about this poem, the last line..."unduly shamed". To fit, I wanted to hear "duly ashamed".

Other than that, the content was intimate, a little window to some thoughts, and a good read. Thanks.

ps, these gave...kritikisto? I'm unfamiliar with that word.

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