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Lost in the Rain |
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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
*also, i wouls like to thank everyone who has replied to any of my poems in my time being here. u dont kno how confident they have made me in my poetry writing. thanx ^_^* Lost in the Rain head bowed eyes clenched legs pumping heart wrenched no doubt consumed by what i feel but i cant find a way to deal and as the growing darkness calls the rain around me steadily falls shock, anger, and confusion fill my mind like the fog of sleep yet the thing that shakes me back into reality is the pain nothing physical, of course for physical pain couldn't possibly hurt this much no, the hurt of betrayal bypasses all senses and strikes the heart immediately and fatally i was so sure that i had finally gotten relief from those years of anguish from the memories during the day and the nightmares waking me at night but now i see the err of my ways although it's his fault, i have only myself to blame it was I who trusted him the falling raindrops mingle with the sweat on my brow and the tears obscuring my vision further simply running to escape my stupidity and the sight of him from the writhing clutter of thoughts in my conscience one clear question arises why? of course this is followed by why me? then the last why him? then no more distinguishable thoughts come for they have been drowned out by the pain once again of all people why him? the one i trusted above all else the one i would've done anything for the one with my very soul in his hand the one i loved but therein lies the problem i loved him i trusted him way too much he was the perfect key to my downfall but why? why did it have to come crashing down when i was so close to what i wanted? this can't be the way of the world surely if he only knew what i was going to do then he wouldn't have betrayed me as such surely if he only knew how i felt then everything would be alright and i'd be in his arms again but no, he ruined it and left me, broken in heart and spirit, to my pain so i ran with nowhere to go but away far away from that place that now horrible place but it doesn't matter now the memory has already been made and there is no going back i now run through the rain head bowed, eyes clenched legs pumping, heart wrenched far too consumed by what I feel for me to find a way to deal and as the growing darkness calls the rain around me steadily falls ~~Poetry is written emotion~~ |
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Sorrow Member
since 2006-06-14
Posts 83Ireland |
This poem is so sad. Your pain echoes through it. Great piece of writing. |
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Internalexile Junior Member
since 2006-06-15
Posts 38UK |
Breathtaking, I too have felt the pain in betrayl, its allways most painful when its someone close to you. Great write! Internalexile! Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak... |
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Digital_Hell Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202Amidst black roses |
i love it! i have felt betrayal deeply in my soul. i can share in the pain here. keep it coming please sic vis pucem parrabellum |
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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
thanx guys. im glad u can feel it. ^_^ ~~Poetry is written emotion~~ |
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Tears in the rain New Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 8 |
"shock, anger, and confusion fill my mind like the fog of sleep yet the thing that shakes me back to reality is the pain nothing physical, of course for physical pain couldn't possibly hurt this much no, the hurt of betrayal bypasses all senses and strikes the heart immediately and fatally" That's my favorite part. probably because I can relate so well. Incredible poem!  |
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