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Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

0 posted 2006-06-05 11:51 PM

So superior I watch you stand
judging who you think I am

So you'll only see the mask I wear
and never know about the screams I hear

The screams that come from deep within
the place I'll never let you in

Where hatred boils within my heart
and the darkness there will not depart

It wraps me in it's dark embrace
a prisoner in this horrid place

But I shield you from this pain that's mine
I laugh and smile and say I'm fine

The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

1 posted 2006-06-06 04:04 PM

As the lightning strikes down with its' fury
the pain resonates from its' thunderous roar
and just like the snake as it pierces your neck
the venom sears into the blood evermore

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I enjoy your slightly darker style of poetry. Thanks for sharing.

^_^
Jill

/\/The Editing Queen\/\

It's strange that words are so inadequate. Yet, like the asthmatic struggling for breath, so the lover must struggle for wo

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

2 posted 2006-06-06 05:13 PM

nicely written. and very true. the people that judge us do not understand. lovely writing style. look forward to hearing more soon

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

3 posted 2006-06-10 06:14 AM

My kinda poem very real very dark hit home with its simplicity very good.

The very deep did rot: O Christ!
That ever this should be!
Yea, slimy things did crawl with legs
Upon the slimy sea.

Reality is darker than the darkest nightmare.

I went to the desert on a horse with no name, it felt good to get out of the rain.

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

4 posted 2006-06-14 03:42 AM

How very true. Reality is indeed darker! And there's alot of reality in my poems.

*Angel*

Frank W. Torres
Member

since 2006-06-10

Posts 133

5 posted 2006-06-14 04:01 PM

Your work is very good. You certainly strike cords with your style.

trUstNooNe
Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 91

6 posted 2006-06-14 07:59 PM

i love it,it decribes me so well,very nicely written.But your right it is very hard to let people in when you know that they don't and won't understand.nice.*.

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

7 posted 2006-06-15 03:44 AM

Sadly, there's many people who make judgements, even though they know nothing about you. But, even then, what gives them the right?

*Angel*

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

8 posted 2006-06-15 08:43 PM

ummm... yeah this one is really good. I write some depressing poems, but most of them...all of them have cussing in it, and i don't know if this web site would allow it. But i really like this one.

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