Dark Poetry #4 |
Life Through Darkness |
trUstNooNe Member
since 2006-05-21
Posts 91 |
The darkness I dream about. I tucks me in and gives me a deadly kiss goodnight. I'm surronded by it, not knowing how to get rid of it. But at the same time almost wishing it would stay. Wrapped inside it's twisted world of revenge, hate, and dismay. I can see my self fading away. I'm now barely holding on to reality, yet slipping just slightly with every step i take. I know it's killing me, but I'm going to have to take that chance. To prosper through the darkness, I'll bet my life on that. |
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niere Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77 |
I really like this. You make the situation seem so inescapable for many reasons... Alot of emotion here too. A great write. p.s - i've barely been here 5 minutes myself, but welcome anyway lol. |
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Digital_Hell Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202Amidst black roses |
very cool. you capture the essance of what it is to be lost in your own darkness. to be unable to reach out for hope. |
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Venus1974 Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 79Tennessee, USA |
Can relate a lot to this too Good write thanx for sharing Peace and happiness to us all, Venus |
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Sorrow Member
since 2006-06-14
Posts 83Ireland |
"I'm surronded by it, not knowing how to get rid of it. But at the same time almost wishing it would stay." - this line really jumped out at me. I feel that I'd be some how saddened if all the darkness I feel just left me. It's hard to explain but I feel like it's part of me, if that makes any sense. Anyway, excellent piece. |
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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
i like how u wrote it in paragraph kinda things. to me, it emphasizd the feelings. speakin of which, they were awesome! this poem is truly amazing. lovin the hopelessly trappd feel. i applaude u *claps* ~~Poetry is written emotion~~ |
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perfect stranger Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 54on cloud 9 |
brilliant the hairs were standing up on the back of my neck, just love it. |
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David D Jerald Member
since 2006-08-07
Posts 74Tucson, Arizona |
Dear trUstNooNe, a quote for you To be a star, you must shine your own light, follow your own path and don't worry about the darkness for that is when stars shine the brightest. Unknown Good luck my friend and good poem. Keep writing and your words will light your way. Dave |
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