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shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

0 posted 2008-01-24 09:01 AM

Sorry if this doesn't make sense, I was just getting my feelings out.

Do you know
what it's like
to live a life
of lies?

To feel
you don't belong;
never doing anything,
but the wrongs?

They look at me
and stare;
whisper
"she's a disgrace"

To her family
to the world

[&] she's a blood broken rose

[This message has been edited by shattered-smiles (01-26-2008 08:47 AM).]

Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

1 posted 2008-01-26 02:51 AM

When I first read through, I was like, "what the heck?" But I went back and finally noticed the note at the top. What I see here is not one poem, but two seperate pieces. If you were to seperate it after the fourth stanza, they might make more sense. Thanks for sharing!

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

2 posted 2008-01-26 08:46 AM

I see where you're coming from. It's like two poems in one. I'll seperate them and then they'll make more sense. Thanx A.O.V!
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

3 posted 2008-02-15 10:25 PM

hey hey,
Tor, i'm almost crying here. yes and yes. i know exactly what ur talking about, even if its just ur feelings blurted on paper. this made total sence to me. thank you.
!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

4 posted 2008-02-16 01:05 AM

i know what it feels like. i can really relate. that's actually how i feel all the time.

black beautiful eyes looking back at me showing me, no fear will show.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

5 posted 2008-02-17 08:07 PM

I'm really glad you guys can relate. Midnightdreamer, it's how I feel all the time too.
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

6 posted 2008-02-18 11:02 AM

i differ with the view of "a of v" in the first listed comment to you poem. i wouldn't change a thing. the reason, it conveys a meaning to me but then the choice is not mine, it is yours!

do no focus the ear on the eye of another but look and listen to the beat of your own heart and mind.

lies and truth can be the same. they are perceptions. they are akin to parallax views.

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

7 posted 2008-02-18 11:11 AM

ps...

found the poem interesting and unique! i have an interest in personality and the subject of truth and lies.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

8 posted 2008-02-18 08:01 PM

two different poems?! what?.. really?..this can't be it sounds like they belong together. its like a story it sounded like you didnt finish it though... over all i think it was pretty good! keep up the good work!

~Zach~

LynnFromCT
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since 2008-02-18

Posts 53
CT, USA

9 posted 2008-02-18 08:24 PM

i dont think this was a poem at all.. but a post on feelings - and yes honey we have all felt like this at one time or another. have faith, it will all come together in time.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

10 posted 2008-03-24 05:33 PM

Thanx for all the comments guys. Everyone on PIP are what keeps me up and writing again.

TJ

No One Knew She Bled To Feel; To Remind Herself That She Was Real

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