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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
“I just got back from heaven, dear” She blows him a kiss. More truth than ever crossed her plastic lips. Forsake his broken smile lines as he asks “How was your day?” He knows well enough that… She won’t believe in God until she starts to fade. No, she won’t have a thing to do with fantasy But she’s the one who needs it the most “It’s going to be nice; my life.” She lies. So, what happens when she falls from the sky? Because right now she’s so damn high. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
oh gosh. this is awesome! I love the last three lines! |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
I absolutely cannot believe that this one has gone so un-noticed, or at least un-responded to. This was phenominal, Hollow, but I would, of course expect nothing less from you. The more I read this one, the more it got to me. There is a lot said, and then a lot just underneath the surface or just between the lines if you will. I am taken aback. Kudos, and thanks for making my night with this gem!!! Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wowowow. courts this is brilliant!!!!!!!!!! yeah lasrt three lines are amazing so wonderful as always nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Wow. I am actually kind of ecstatic. I thought this poem was to be lost in the archives. Purity, ah, thanks for that reply, you rock. Sophieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I love you. 'Nuff said. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
"forsake is broken smile lines..." wow. hollow, i've missed you since we've drifted apart after you rejected my proposal of marriage... thanks for reminding me why i proposed... lol. this was friggin' awesome!@! of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Eve, forgive me. I was young and immature and juvenile and terrified by the pens of you deep poetic guys. Lol. Ah thank you for replying, always makes my day. Courts. Hollow. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
AHHHHH *clenches teeth* ahh that was sooo brilliant.. ahhh the rhythm!!!!!!! it was...it was PERFECT. and those last three lines. the LAST line!!! 'because right now she's so damn high' oh you are a poet. you are. The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
ohh oops, it wasn't clenches teeth it was "clenches hands" because omg, that poem @&40 ahh it gave me tingles. |
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