Dark Poetry #4 |
The Voice of Violence |
gelato Member
since 2005-10-27
Posts 63TN,USA |
Hello, can you comprehend? My world of dark, should I explain? Because I envision softly aching It leaves it's deeds while I'm weeping And the villains that were left still Cause me pain. I do maintain. There is a voice of violence. With silent screams I am alone Pathetic pleas I have known And my shackles I do unclamp And I just yell against the prison camp When my eyes were grabbed by a sight That gave me fright It struck at night. It was the voice of violence. And in a wakened state I saw Demanding people at my door. People talking and they're seeking Others sneering at everything. People righting wrongs when voices Tried to share. But no one dared Perturb the voice of violence. "You say that you did not know Secrets like some grapevines grow. Hear my words so your fright subdues. Break those chains that I might reach you." But my words like silent raindrops fell Upon your mind and still You show the voice of violence. But the people bowed and prayed To a diff'rent god they made, And their shrine trashed people knowing With the worms that it was forming And the lines said, "The mind you should follow is unwritten Upon the walls, No thinking at all." It's speaking in the voice of violence. [This message has been edited by gelato (11-06-2005 09:01 AM).] |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
The idea behind this piece is very good. though it seems at some points that your meaning is unclear and cofusion is brought upon us. But if that's the idea behind the voice Great Job. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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gelato Member
since 2005-10-27
Posts 63TN,USA |
Thanks, Jeremiah. "Buckle Up! It makes it harder for the aliens to suck you out of your car" |
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