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Sikanda Member
since 2002-10-08
Posts 54 |
A prison made of my own mistakes no repentence, no forgiveness no hope in this world for fakes no chance for deliverance no aid for the wounded - for the sick and twisted who refuse to pay their penance~ Staring into a black abyss a hell of my own making my life has been a hit and miss and my soul is ready to be taken --- I've made my choices right or wrong for better or for worse - I lived my life - now I'm waiting to be blessed - or to be cursed~ I lived my life to the best of my ability I need not defend my actions to you - I need not try to justify my beliefs - or whats inside my soul If you really know all then you can see that what I speak is true~ I hold no hope for better days no sorrow for what was left behind no regret for the words screamed in my mind when I thought I was all alone - no regret for anything said or anything I've done~ Staring into swirls of mist not sure which way to choose - the grayness or the dark abyss either way I can't help but feel that I'll have to pay - no matter what I'm going to lose~ Yeah I gambled - I took the risks I played the hand I had been given I refuse to have regrets I made the best of my situation - Now I refuse to be dismissed I won't be passed over - like I don't exist I refuse to apologize for choosing a life of bliss instead of eternal lies(your lies!)~ Can't you see you made me like this? Can't you see you made me like this? Can't you see you made me like this? |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow... I liked this! "You" sound so defensive in some of the stanzas though. It was great, except I don't always agree? I don't know... "I lived my life to the best of my ability I need not defend my actions to you - I need not try to justify my beliefs - or whats inside my soul If you really know all then you can see that what I speak is true~ I hold no hope for better days no sorrow for what was left behind no regret for the words screamed in my mind when I thought I was all alone - no regret for anything said or anything I've done~" I liked these two stanzas the best, if I were to pick a favorite. The reason being, stanza #1 - It sounds kind of rebelious to me, no offence if it was not meant to be taken that way, and, like I said before, defensive, it's kind of cool to see that. Stanza #2 - Hopeless, rebellious, and not ashamed, at times I feel like this. It is something I can relate rather well too... Anyway, Thanks a bunch for sharing, sorry no one posted on this sooner  @-->--- |
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Sikanda Member
since 2002-10-08
Posts 54 |
I like this poem but I think its a little lengthy - I'm working on a shorter version which I'll probably post later. I don't know -its just missing something and I'm not sure what exactly but your view on it is welcome The whole poem is supposed to be defensive - and anyways I was lsitening to Godsmack when I started writing this ... Thanks for bumping this poem up so people can see it. Hopefully I'll get some replies this time! |
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