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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
across the longing bridge lie no palatial grounds only graveyards and the inane silence of white crossed hope I stop halfway to look at the water a black mirror window reflecting the human stain of evil brewed strong if I jumped I'm sorry If I didn't then I regret not leaping for sorely the power is great and the moment is always upon me [This message has been edited by coyote (11-28-2004 08:59 PM).] |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Don't see much from you here, but it seems this truly does belong in the dark section. But depression can't be in total control all the time. I mean even in the midst of it a response like perhaps your readers would miss you and Jesus loves you should at least make you smile. Love. -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Wow... this was amazing in every detail. And I truly felt it. The wording of the first two stanzas were outstanding and poetic beauty. Thank you for sharing your gift, and I agree with GIS - this is dark with imagery, but so very well done. Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Oh, this was so cool. Ah, that's all for a good reply and that, but it was truly. Hollow. Courtney. HEY! I'M A SENIOR MEMBER! I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, GIS. I value your thoughts on this one. Thank You Purity, for the sweet words. Thank You, Courtney. "So cool" is a very kind review. I truly appreciate you all. Billy 8) |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Dear Coyote WOW! (I was tempted to leave it at that, but hey...) :-) This was incredible and oh so powerful. I feel for you buddy. Peace. Sylvia |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Magnifique! You pondered and chose your words well! Palatial...YES! Sorely.....YES!!! Sometimes hand-in-hand is a better gesture than the strange human art of clapping them together as a sign of acceptance. I love this, coyote! Rider "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks so much for reading, Sylvia. Peace to you also. Thank you very much, Rider. Your comments are most appreciated. Billy 8) |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
WOW... |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
AHHH so great. loved:i f I jumped I'm sorry hehehe just ADORED this one(sorry looking for new adjectives hehe) love and empathy sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Sinfully Innocent. A WOW is too kewl! Thanks, Darkness Witch. Your search for adjectives is appreciated! Billy 8) |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
dude! this was so damn good. dark and beautiful. my favourite bit was if i jumped im sorry ..... ya no the bit. great stuff. keep it up! LOR you're the only one keeping me alive |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, LOR. I'm glad you liked it and appreciate the read and comments. CB 8) "If at first an idea is not absurd, there is no hope for it." |
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