Dark Poetry #4 |
For Freedom? |
KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
Summer of Sam Winter of mine Brow like a god A hand full of time Shall we be? Forever me Inside a seed That bleeds And bleeds My shelter a shoulder My eye a beholder Of pain and agony Of sighing misery A greater evil A greater good A vote A voice No chance no choice My vision my clarity Ripped, torn from me Useless ammunition For a greater fiend That chooses, that rends My ties My friends I hate I bleed But still That seed That traps That conceals I beg, I appeal For release For freedom. Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Freedom can cost if you want. Or it can be free... -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
I thought this lost something half-way through, but is still a terrific poem. Something changed midway, though. Still very library worthy. Thanks for sharing. |
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NightFall Member
since 2004-01-28
Posts 88The land known as England |
Freedom isnt something we have its something we are given, everybody has to fight for theirs. "My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere. |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Interesting.. And I agree, freedom does have a cost..but it's generally worth fighting for. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Love this, as someone else said, very library worthy. *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
there you go... you've got it back i see! awesome stuff LOR you're the only one keeping me alive |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
hehe does anyone else notice the wicked shape of that poem!!!?? yeah i liked it, but it drifted for awhile. nice ending love and empathy sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
Nothing ain't worth nothing, but it's free--and to be free is a fallacy unless of course it's within our minds, and that can never be taken from us, regardless. thought provoking your words, enjoyed! |
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