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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-10-05 05:20 PM

She has long dirty blond hair
Her eyes change from grey to dark brown
About 5'4 and she wears the shinnest clothes
Including the knee high black leather strap boots
Shes beautiful and my heart seems to have developed a spot
She calls it home, a place to stay

If your dress moves let it show
But keep it on because you'll need it
We'll go for a ride
Across the town
Stop at the store, on our way
To a place that'll envy you

Let me play you a song
On my guitar
You can roll your head and feel the tunes
The melodic ridge sweetened harmony

Heaven must have split in half
To drop you here
If God asks he'll never get you back
Because you're the jewel of my world
Its set in place to a lullaby
And we'll be there til we die

I like the way it feels
Sends chills through my soul
Its a paradise where I don't need to mow the grass
The weather is a perfect cool
No aches or pains
And a distant view of the beautiful rains

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

1 posted 2004-10-05 05:56 PM

I like this...but why do I get the feeling you're talking about me? scary. tell me you arn't and then I can laugh at myself. mwa ha ha ha haaaaaaaaa. But then again, I don't have long dirty blonde hair anymore. it's short and I just dyed it dark red. and I don't wear dresses anyways. yeah. la la la lalaaaaaa. lataaa.

- Riva

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

2 posted 2004-10-05 09:12 PM

dug this one tremendously, green. course, i related more from a different gendered perspective. loved the guitar song induced happiness. i can relate to this as well. very well done!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2004-10-05 11:45 PM

Really very nice Craig!

Yep! well written

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2004-10-06 09:37 AM

Verrrrry nice Craig:

Heaven must have split in half
To drop you here
If God asks he'll never get you back

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2004-10-06 11:43 PM

Yeah the best thing about this one is this girl is an imaginary girl. There is no perfect human love in my heart. Thank you for the kind replies though.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

6 posted 2004-10-07 02:05 AM

"Shes beautiful and my heart seems to have developed a spot
She calls it home, a place to stay"

Craig, you just seem to always have that great quality in your work. A beautiful piece.

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

7 posted 2004-10-07 09:46 AM

There is in mine, GIS~! (My problem is, and always seems to be) they just don't know it (yet). Very nicely done, my friend!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

8 posted 2004-10-07 12:11 PM

Thank you Courtney. This was just me creating someone to basically break the confinement of being broke and not really having much I can do about it. You should meet my band. hehe. lol.

Purity-yeah but I wonder if maybe she does exist. I keep having these dreams and last night I had another vision, only instead of being some heavenly or demonic being it was a beautiful girl climbing a tree, and I could only see her from her right arm pit up. Everything else was covered by a smokey white light. I guess I just don't understand.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

9 posted 2004-10-07 12:56 PM

LMAO!!!!! imaginary? groovy, I have an imaginary boyfriend too. his name is George. he likes kung fu and being my guitar. lol. ok I won't say anything more, sounds like your friend is pretty hot

.

- Riva

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

10 posted 2004-10-07 01:24 PM

Oh, my friend..."that person" does exist... maybe there is a devine reason why you only see "that person" from the right arm pit up (which I loved this imagery, lol)... and I know with all by being that you will indeed find "that person". So far "that person's" life has been incomplete, and I know they need you, too. One day we'll all be reading poems from you that are odes...lol (to "that person").

psst~next time, at least try and look into "that person's" eyes... (wink)

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

11 posted 2004-10-07 04:55 PM

I saw her eyes and they were beautiful. Everything about her was beautiful. But I didn't look into her eyes. Though I can go back in memory to do so. Ouch. It kinda reminds me of the dream I had last night. I saw a whole bunch of girls. And they were all hot, but they were whores. lol.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

12 posted 2004-10-08 05:41 PM

this powm has a lot of nice lines but the best by far....
"I'll take you to a place that'll envy you"

Not only is it a beautifully written line but it has a very nice rythem yo it.

Very well done Greeny

Awake through motion with curiosity to curtain your first move
Over arms length they'll break protocol
Jealous envy for the youngest one

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

13 posted 2004-10-08 11:50 PM

Thank you eor. Its been awhile. Actually I'm not sure if I really even expected to see your bleeding hand anymore.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

coyote
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since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

14 posted 2004-10-10 08:35 PM

"He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11"

coyote

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

15 posted 2004-10-12 12:03 PM

He sure has coyote.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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