Dark Poetry #4 |
Bloody Rivers of Fire |
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I've seen the pictures I'm in these pictures Something fake about myself Roast my soul with the wits of a fool I'm cooking my life Sunburnt and sweat Building up to a higher place And I fall back down... Pitch my story This is my life Eternal mistake Punishment take Rat on the barge In this I die Life of what it was Till you count up the fall Down on your face Dying it raw Lost myself... Hypocrite X... Giving for this Doing for this Living for this Losing all this Did God notice Cooking me,... Just like this........ .....Out Deep fried |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
sweet action! I love the layout of this...especially the ending, very creative...awesome job as a whole too! ~*brezee*~ |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
thank you. -GIS |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
reminds me of a barbeque. "Something fake about myself" I feel like this sometimes, even though I am real with myself, I sometimes think, others might perceive me as fake. But then, you can not control how the beholder sees. Great writing. great indeed. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ha! you said it quite well, Craig. I liked the choppy ending - beat style . . . |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
hey you, looks nice, I didn't expect the ending line but that grabbed my attention. I'm cooking my life Sunburnt and sweat Building up to a higher place And I fall back down... reminds me of something I wrote not too long ago. also the title has my name in it, funky. anywho, I dug this =) ttyl, - Bon Running out of pain |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thanx again. I've started a new job selling perfume and cologne. And I'm basically starting out making nothing, but my boss makes 1-2 thousand a week and his boss makes 6-7 thousand a week and his boss makes 56,000 a week. It's just getting to those points takes alot of hard work and thick training in the streets in the sun with my gas usually just above empty. Hints the part about the cooking; plus I've been doing things I shouldn't lately. I'm responding wrong. Talk long; talk wrong. -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
e-mail me. (you know what it is, this is Bonnie, ha ha) |
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