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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
Why do I still try? When I already know That I have failed. Scared to dread The enevitable Sick of being in trouble But no one understands Tired of feeling so worthless But I can't do (edited by Moderator) Why won't anyone help me I'm lying, covered in blood Still no one helps me Too busy to care Too busy to notice That I'm falling apart Crying at night My writing is making no sense Just bunches of mixed up words Just another sign of my failure I can't keep doing this The pain is too much I want it to stop But I keep on going Listen to the voices But they just mess me up even worse My writing neat and tidy It should be black and scrawling with rage Rage at the world i don't understand Filled with people i can't comprehend (edited by Moderator) the people Just like them I have no identity, just a smudged dot Its all too much Its sink or swim, here on judgement day I'm drowning. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. [This message has been edited by littlewing (09-14-2004 10:01 AM).] |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
This was the wholly best ever. Omg, I loved it so much, and I felt all of it. I understood.......god I'm jealous of your writing. The ending lines....Arrrrghhhhh I've saved it and now I'm going to reread it. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I like it. It has how you feel and its more like a statement than a poem which works with the title, because its almost like its too much for the poem to handle and the feeling is that of reaching out, out of the page even. I like it. -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this i can relate to. everything you wrotee down is exactly what im going thru rite now and this has expressed those feelings perfectly.... beautiful write. Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I can relate to how you feel and society itself will never comprehend the mind of a writer, not fully . . . the gift you do possess is the abilty TO write . . . a release . . . |
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