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serenities_blood Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56New Zealand |
Get out of my way, All of you. I need my space. Here I am, suffocating. But you dont care, You just want to know every detail in my life. But thats just it, Its my life. Not yours. Leave me alone, Wont you. Is there no such thing As a little bit of privacy? Your crowding me, Suffocating me with Your love and care. Im not trying to be rude, But please understand me When I say, Get out of my way, All of you. I need my space. Thanx guys, Im not sure how good it is, so please help me improve! GINA |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
i like i once agen like how u bring the first paragraph to the end!!! "Suffocating me with your love and care" niice! LOR "When i close my eyes, i remember how to smile, under my umbrella im an accomplished exile..." |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
i liked this one, as well. I keep seeing where you say 'help me improve' but, although I wouldn't really notice if you needed to improve on too much, I dont see where you could improve a lot on your writes. your poems all....come together I guess and they're good so....yea...nice job and keep writing!  ~*brezee*~ |
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