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Im Vulnerable |
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serenities_blood Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56New Zealand |
Eyes wide shut. I pretend everythings okay. But really its not I feel scared, always looking over my shoulder I cant get rid of the feeling That I'm the biggest joke I fear to close my eyes. It makes me feel vulnerabe. I cant read thoughts You cant read mine. And all this secrecy, Whispers and private jokes. Are they about you, are they about me? I guess we will never know. I cant help thinking I cant help seeing. I just wonder if its just me... Or if everyone Feels vulnerable with their Eyes wide shut. Hi, this is my first poem, so Im sorry if its bad or hasnt got enough depth. Please help me improve. O and for those who once knew me, this is not Laura anymore, it is Gina! |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
GINA! i am thoroughly impressed! that was brilliante! im all excited now! i looved it! AND NO IM NOT JUST SAYING THAT! yay!!! i really liked how you brought your first line back later at the end... very nice! "When i close my eyes, i remember how to smile, under my umbrella im an accomplished exile..." |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is really kool for your first poem..... hope to keep on seeing more from you gina.... keep up the writing Mel live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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serenities_blood Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56New Zealand |
Omg thanx so much for your support, I wasnt really sure how good it was but from reading your replies Im going to definatley write some more! Thanx again.  |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Wow, great! especially for a first timer. excellent, now i'm going to go read your other two. Hollow. Courts. "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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