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Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2003-10-15 12:56 PM

The story with the blackest frames
the cloudiest window panes
the darkest secrets
secreted away
The story with the closets
the skeletons - forgotten
And everyone
and everything
exactly in its place

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

Asian Rain
Member

since 2003-10-11

Posts 73

1 posted 2003-10-15 01:47 PM

Not really sure why I liked this, maybe because it has an edge that is my mood today. Good read!

Asia

Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

2 posted 2003-10-15 02:00 PM

Yeah, I'm not sure why I thought it was good enough to post, either. There's something under the surface, something difficult to put your finger on.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

Asian Rain
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 73

3 posted 2003-10-15 02:42 PM

I'm sorry, I didn't mean to give the impression I didn't like it. I really did. It sort of reminded me of my own story. After a series of traumatic events, I moved into an apartment on the seventh floor (7th story) to put the past(with its skeletons and secrets) behind me (everything in its proper place). The windows are still a little grimy, but I keep at them with the Windex.

I honestly thought it was a very good poem.

Asia

[This message has been edited by Asian Rain (10-15-2003 02:43 PM).]

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-10-15 04:29 PM

everything is as excatly as it should be

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

5 posted 2003-10-21 12:18 PM

Ah, fear not. I understood that you liked it. I was referring to the reason it was appealing, which yet eludes me. Although, for you, it's quite literal. That pleases me greatly. And is also extremely fascinating, because I wrote this while sitting in downtown Chicago. I was looking up at a building and noticed one floor had darker windows. Counting up, I found it to be the seventh. I'm amazed that it worked out so well.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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