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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-11-30 07:48 PM


v.


Gnomen


On one forked foray
From what was familiar
She chanced upon a creature
Shorter than need be

Clad in the plain cloth of poverty
Misfortune
Visible through the tears

Taking a roadside liberty
He was passing his niter
Through a root-like obscenity

The stream
Dampening the dirt

The scene
Dampening her

She noted it odd
To suffer the sweep of arousal
From the visage before her

This gnarl of a man
Leathered and hoary
Bent to a weight unseen

But, with Jasper for eyes
Sharp and clean as crystal

Misfortune
Visible in his tears


Parts 1-3 are here   /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=82&topic=003505

Part 4 is here  
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"In looking Northward, I see a light"



[This message has been edited by wranx (12-01-2003 09:04 PM).]

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Snowflake From Hell
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1 posted 2003-11-30 08:44 PM


good piece i enjoyed readin it

We do away with your kind...I am war I am pain I am all you've ever slein I am tears in your eyes I am truth I am lies.   Dimmu Borgir

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2003-11-30 09:00 PM


wranx
A remarkable follow up. Enjoyed.

Martie
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3 posted 2003-11-30 09:23 PM


and again you amaze!
littlewing
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4 posted 2003-12-01 02:17 AM


and in this . .  you took me from
the dream right back onto that dusty road . . .


*smiling at the title*


I see a chapbook baby . . .

I want to one day read these
WHOLE
and I will
*smile*

you are a brilliant man
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (12-01-2003 02:20 AM).]

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
5 posted 2003-12-01 06:01 PM



Ed?...I am truly in awe of this series of writes.

I have to echo Sue here...you ARE brilliant.

Love and hugs...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2003-12-01 08:03 PM


wranx
Well everyone does it. LOL

b.costen
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7 posted 2003-12-01 08:26 PM


Mr. Wranx,

You are brilliantly sick minded, your poetry is astonishing and at the same time well received.

I agree with everyone else, you've hit on something quite good here.

Too bad I couldn't have found anything wrong with it,

Good stuff,
Ben

so what's it going to be then, eh?

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-12-03 01:13 PM


waiting for the next one . . .
brian sites
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9 posted 2003-12-04 01:31 PM


smiling at Sy's response...

is a good niter there
you old root!


Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2003-12-04 01:32 PM


going to find the rest now....
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11 posted 2004-01-18 10:30 AM


....and I'm bumping these beauties so the rest of the folks will miss you too.

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