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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-11-30 07:48 PM

v.

Gnomen

On one forked foray
From what was familiar
She chanced upon a creature
Shorter than need be

Clad in the plain cloth of poverty
Misfortune
Visible through the tears

Taking a roadside liberty
He was passing his niter
Through a root-like obscenity

The stream
Dampening the dirt

The scene
Dampening her

She noted it odd
To suffer the sweep of arousal
From the visage before her

This gnarl of a man
Leathered and hoary
Bent to a weight unseen

But, with Jasper for eyes
Sharp and clean as crystal

Misfortune
Visible in his tears

Parts 1-3 are here   /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=82&topic=003505

Part 4 is here
/pip/Forum83/HTML/000235.html

"In looking Northward, I see a light"

[This message has been edited by wranx (12-01-2003 09:04 PM).]

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

1 posted 2003-11-30 08:44 PM

good piece i enjoyed readin it

We do away with your kind...I am war I am pain I am all you've ever slein I am tears in your eyes I am truth I am lies. Dimmu Borgir

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-11-30 09:00 PM

wranx
A remarkable follow up. Enjoyed.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2003-11-30 09:23 PM

and again you amaze!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-12-01 02:17 AM

and in this . . you took me from
the dream right back onto that dusty road . . .

*smiling at the title*

I see a chapbook baby . . .

I want to one day read these
WHOLE
and I will
*smile*

you are a brilliant man
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (12-01-2003 02:20 AM).]

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2003-12-01 06:01 PM

Ed?...I am truly in awe of this series of writes.

I have to echo Sue here...you ARE brilliant.

Love and hugs...
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2003-12-01 08:03 PM

wranx
Well everyone does it. LOL

b.costen
Member

since 2003-11-02

Posts 107
ontario, CAN

7 posted 2003-12-01 08:26 PM

Mr. Wranx,

You are brilliantly sick minded, your poetry is astonishing and at the same time well received.

I agree with everyone else, you've hit on something quite good here.

Too bad I couldn't have found anything wrong with it,

Good stuff,
Ben

so what's it going to be then, eh?

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2003-12-03 01:13 PM

waiting for the next one . . .

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

9 posted 2003-12-04 01:31 PM

smiling at Sy's response...

is a good niter there
you old root!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2003-12-04 01:32 PM

going to find the rest now....

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

11 posted 2004-01-18 10:30 AM

....and I'm bumping these beauties so the rest of the folks will miss you too.

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