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wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-12-03 02:22 PM

The Gate

vi
As the myriad pilgrim paths
Converge with each other
Like the braiding of a rope

The destination becomes
Clearer

No longer
Just a dark regularity
Blanketed in the haze of dawn

The sun rises
And burns the veil away
To reveal the great gate
Of a lonely outpost

Looming
In its weighty welcome

Thoughts of adventure play
About her eyes
And her dark compel
Plays coy
At the corners of her mouth

With the prospect of passing
Through into something
New

To once again
Stroll among a populace

Perchance to find an angel
Less grievous

Or just a man
That wouldn’t look too deeply

If only for awhile

"In looking Northward, I see a light"

[This message has been edited by wranx (12-03-2003 10:58 PM).]

PsychoticBunni
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 162
Mythical Atlantis

1 posted 2003-12-03 05:37 PM

i loved the write. i hope she finds what she's looking for. hopefully an angel because those are forever, like your talent appears to be.

Meg

tragedy is cutting your finger. comedy is falling into an open sewer and dying.
-Mel Brooks

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-12-03 06:44 PM

wranx
You have a wonderful style of metaphors.Enjoyed

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-12-03 11:58 PM

ohhh a devilish woman this is Ed . . .
her sweet dreams end and she comes upon
a new place . . . unknown
plying her trade . . .
upon the innocent
*smile*
(sounds like she will meet HIM soon)

you are brilliant, my love
I cannot wait to see what happens next
isleofjah
xxoo

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

4 posted 2003-12-04 01:58 AM

another great write, Ed.

Jason

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

5 posted 2003-12-04 01:34 PM

this is great...

man

this could almost stand on its own

damn!..metaphorman!

awesome Ed

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2004-01-18 10:31 AM

I hope you get the call to come back here

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