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The Poker Face
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The Poker Face |
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gadfly4you Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 37 |
I wrestled with my watch one day, for a minute first, and then an hour. Smugly it sat there, serene, around a freckled wrist, the small wiry hairs blown back from the face, a scrimshaw yellow face. Shiny and cool to the skin the case felt. The silver case, wrapped around small gears and springs, unyielding essence. Beneath the gleaming crystal (A reflection from the sun?) I watched as the honey gold hands shake around hands introducing each other to each other, a Sisyphus dance. The brown mottled bump, like a squashed raisin, gooey,uneven, rests wearily at two o’clock, getting darker with each introduction. A small child with a dirty face laughs, as he bumps his bottom on the hard dirt at the bottom of the sliding pon. A slight turn of the hand, eyes darting quickly, to the left, to life’s design, a poker face. The knob, tiny and ridged, sticking from the side bit into my thumb and forefinger as I turned it. Turned it past my birthdays, towards marriage, towards coloring books, towards Spain, towards cancer and abruptly it stopped, biting deeper into my thumb. The dull lifeless band, pressed with imperfe ctions, tapered, sprout out from top to bottom, grasping each other knifed in a grip of death. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
~will be back to re-read~ this one needs time to absorb... like ive said before.. the descriptions are amazing |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
hmm..had another read..as well as looked up "Sisyphus"...have a better understanding of the poem (i think).... ...analyzation of time within one's life... leaves a feeling of sadness, but maybe verging on slight indifference..while the poem becomes "narrow necked" towards the end, it sorta pushes the reader to read faster, as being hastened by something... maybe you intended for the end of the poem to coincide with the end of ones "life" or how quickly the end comes....i dont know for sure...but was fun trying to decipher it. i'll say again, i really enjoy your writing..im looking forward to more.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. My first eyes on you brought vision of the hurried ending...abrupt The reference to cancer...the sun in cancer is home. This was very powerful and well said...but I found it to be somewhat vague. Hope you to expound...and will attend. ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) This is so powerfully poignant, dearest friend, now put on a field day face and just get out there and enjoy life to the fullest each moment! (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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gadfly4you Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 37 |
Again, Thank you all for the welcome! Muted...right on target.....thanks for taking the time to reflect with me :-) |
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