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choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

0 posted 2004-01-21 01:31 PM

I. Night Moon

Where has the moon gone
so full with radiant light?
It must have burst in pieces-
all these white flakes fill the sky
floating, swirling everywhere.

~~~~~~<@>~~~~~~

II. Day Moon

Surely it is true,
that the moon is made of ice
In its waning-
white sheets spread on the river
as if dropped from the night sky.

~C

Iron Wolf
Junior Member

since 2004-01-20

Posts 23

1 posted 2004-01-21 01:36 PM

It must have burst in pieces-
all these white flakes fill the sky
floating, swirling everywhere.

Those were my favourite lines, all round excellent.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

2 posted 2004-01-21 01:37 PM

*giggle* ok..im gonna blush now, cause i thought this was going to be like "Two Moon Junction"!

*gasp*, so i was wrong!

looks like im stalking you!

no, i really admire the way you write...
and im learning by watching

"...and longed to kiss her hand an lie a thousand summers at her feet." ~excerpt A.L. Tennyson

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

3 posted 2004-01-21 01:53 PM

*giggle* ok..im gonna blush now, cause i thought this was going to be like "Two Moon Junction"!

*gasp*, so i was wrong!

looks like im stalking you!

no, i really admire the way you write...
and im learning by watching

Suppose you where, have you seen me complain??? Hmmm, maybe I'm stalking you...well in any case, now I'm blushing too, and we do learn from each other...I truly admire your work, your sensitivity, and now you have mobilized my playfulness as you can see from this entry....~C

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

4 posted 2004-01-21 03:26 PM

Where has the moon gone
so full with radiant light?
It must have burst in pieces-
all these white flakes fill the sky
floating, swirling everywhere.

~~~~~~<@>~~~~~~
shattered in pieces
beneath its own face
the lone moon above me
seems so unaffected
wish i were that moon
tonight

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

5 posted 2004-01-21 04:17 PM

From; Inkedgoddess:

shattered in pieces
beneath its own face
the lone moon above me
seems so unaffected
wish i were that moon
tonight

~~~~~~<@>~~~~~~

Full or in pieces
the one moon floats silently
in the void-
as passing clouds rise and fall
what else remains but silence.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2004-01-21 04:29 PM

choshi
A lovely write.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2004-01-21 04:36 PM

some poems can only be described as exquisite...this is one of them

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2004-01-21 05:49 PM

So very much enjoyed this write.
Hugs~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2004-01-21 05:50 PM

nice

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