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0 posted 2004-01-19 01:51 PM




~~~ ~~~
The sky wore
a suit of
grey flannel
to-day.
Clouds heavy laden
with snow
without wind
crawled their way.
Over the river
frozen in time.
It's shoreline
a necklace of
artistry sublime.
Over the trees
now just stick people
sketches.
Stiff, licorice
telephone wire,
and the voices
it catches.
Like drab,
bloated pillows,
as day becomes
night,
the clouds
an ashen
backdrop
for geese
in their flight.
From invisible pockets
lace confetti
is shaken.
Sugar coating
the earth -
Gift for
our eyes
when we
waken.
~~


.


.
Chris Barker
Feb.2002
~~~~~~~~~~

© Copyright 2004 Chris Barker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-01-19 01:54 PM



Well dang it all.  You gals are going to have to start using a hankey alert, because this is the third in a row I've read, and reached....

Well done, Chris.

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2 posted 2004-01-19 01:57 PM


this is so nice!
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3 posted 2004-01-19 02:14 PM


Ah...I read this one slowly to savor every image!  Loved it, Nightshade.  You're so perceptive!
               ~Sadelite~

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4 posted 2004-01-19 02:25 PM


Chris, this was remarkable!  Smooth as silk!
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5 posted 2004-01-19 03:08 PM


Thankyou so much !!
Hugs!

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6 posted 2004-01-19 06:47 PM


Wonderful write Chris...
~Miss and love ya...stay warm, Teed~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

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7 posted 2004-01-19 07:02 PM


Nice writing...James
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8 posted 2004-01-19 07:23 PM


A beautifully crafted write, Chirs.  Wonderful images.  

believe in what your heart feels...

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9 posted 2004-01-19 07:25 PM


nice write
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10 posted 2004-01-19 07:27 PM


Thanks and hugs to you Nancylee & James!

"When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You know
that your name is safe in their mouth." Billy - age 4



    

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11 posted 2004-01-19 07:28 PM


scorpio & vandana - you two snuck in there! LOL. Thankyou so much.
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12 posted 2004-01-19 09:08 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, you make the skies come to life so beautifully, this is true animation, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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13 posted 2004-01-19 09:37 PM


Thankyou dear Noah!
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14 posted 2004-01-19 09:41 PM


There were just too many examples of great phrasing in this write to enumerate them.  Your use of imagery in this is outstanding.
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15 posted 2004-01-19 10:08 PM


Thankyou steaven for the lovely compliment.
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loved your visions
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I can close my eyes and see this painting
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