Streets Of Confused Oblivion

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Open Poetry #30

Streets Of Confused Oblivion

alan6501
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since 2004-01-03

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0 posted 2004-01-18 01:10 PM

Can't you see?
My face is maddened by bitterness around me

Will you walk?
In my streets of confused oblivion

Have you thought?
Just once of how actions can bring on damnation

Is this your point?
To ridicule my attempts at solid ground

Is this reality?
Because everything I'm expieriencing stems from disbelief

Am I truly this empty?
When I'm so damn full of confliction

Do you really care?
Cause all I see is your half-smoked cigarette and mud tracking towards the back door...

(My illusions are the death of me...)
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What do you guys think?

dinky
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since 2002-10-19

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1 posted 2004-01-18 01:16 PM

this was great!

~samantha~

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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2 posted 2004-01-18 02:00 PM

A powerful write.
Today me too had this "Oblivion" in mind but have not yet elaborated it.
Your illusions, once you are aware of them, bring you back on the path of fulfilling life.
Love, Margherita

nn
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 75

3 posted 2004-01-18 02:04 PM

I liked it

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2004-01-18 02:06 PM

alan,
I still think you got a long way to go, enjoyed.

richard taylor
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since 2004-01-13

Posts 136

5 posted 2004-01-18 02:06 PM

I liked this Alan, very well set out [wish I could do this I am still a computer novice] excellent poem.
regards Richard.

LiquidMidnight
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since 2003-09-24

Posts 50

6 posted 2004-01-18 02:56 PM

Very much enjoyed.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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7 posted 2004-01-18 03:07 PM

Powerfully emotion, this is.

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