Open Poetry #30 |
The Forlorn Sun |
Ben Junior Member
since 2004-01-17
Posts 21 |
Within the binds of his eyes she cannot run Powerless and feeble under the forlorn Saudi sun Down her cheek the tepid solution spills From a mundane view of pallid hills Faceless women gather around As she lies spread out on searing ground With emptiness consuming her mind The jolting blade is raised by her own kind Piercing the possessed atmosphere with her screams They be obeying the devils will in a hollow means As shots of blood brutalize the scenes In a mutawa set stage She dwells in the golden cage Tears falling in silent rage Flames revolting over dreams of a blissful page Shackled in the jewels of Al Sa'ud She slice’s thoughts in her cerebral feud Under nuptial demand The morning sun breaths on deaths sand As clean sheets are seized in her devils hand His eyes sending shots down her spine Clutching her shoulders she falls to the line Memory of lineage shame across a trembling hand Cast aside on violet dyed sand As her shattered mouth coughs blood she moans Her body jerking amongst soaring stones Under the forlorn Saudi sun she lies cold and raw A memory of nothing, no one, nobody, no more |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
This is such a sad story. I like some of your word choices here very much, ie: "the tepid solution spills" and "slice’s thoughts in her cerebral feud". Very good. McLean |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhBen~ I felt the poignancy of your message ... hurts to read ... but the pain must be known~ I have read of the stonings in the newspapers... but you brought it home in this piece~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Great piece of writing, Ben. |
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