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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Cast site upon the stillness of thy steep quest And view the adornment which lays at thy paths rest Frolicking and withered away is the surmise of winters stay For spring hath cast itself before the sun’s rays Vacant to my surmise there is no light Yet I hear birds of prey overhead cutting the wind like knives Pounding the air, be that drums I hear? Or is it man made steps of soldiers marching from the rear? Give me ride and I shall charge asunder Commence my gallop before the many flock folds And let each step unfold before me like thunder Let not my perseverance grow cold Take leave of no land Less your heart be subtle It is a wonder to behold that we are not brothers It is entrancing to know that we share not each others journey That we cast fate upon one another in attempt to undermine That we do not offer to each others thirst a glass of wine. [This message has been edited by Ravenwolfvoyager (01-14-2004 06:38 PM).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Jeff You are to be commended for such a fine piece of writing. How wonderful it is to have you sharing your talent with us.  Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I would like to know the inspiration behind this one -- it leaves me wondering. Really enjoyed it! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The emotion here is very crisp...felt like a determined wind beneath strong sails. I believe I heard the hoofbeats of your steed as you rode into battle with the demon. Really well done. TD PS...this was before spinache right? |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Simply stunning. This is wonderful writing, and I so enjoyed reading it. Your imagery is fabulous!  I'll be looking for more of your work.Caroline |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite intriguing. The last stanza, I am curious to know...is it a quote of yours, or of another? Well written, as I have come to expect. You were gone for awhile. It is good to see you back with us. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is just simply AWESOME! You are of great talent! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I read a poem of yours an hour or so ago, and the taste is still with me...now for a second helping! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Give me ride and I shall charge asunder Commence my gallop before the many flock folds And let each step unfold before me like thunder Let not my perseverance grow cold Well, Jeff, I was late getting here today, but I'm very well pleased to see that you have another outstanding poem posted. Thank you.  Hugs  Ethel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Vacant to my surmise there is no light Yet I hear birds of prey overhead cutting the wind like knives Pounding the air, be that drums I hear? Or is it man made steps of soldiers marching from the rear? I fall right into your poems... and I do so like the landing. *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Oh...I enjoyed this very much and am going to hunt for more...wonderful writing with so much to offer. |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
RWV... Your craftsmanship is absolutely awesome. Thank you. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
bump |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jeff Well done, enjoyed your mental flight. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"It is a wonder to behold that we are not brothers It is entrancing to know that we share not each others journey That we cast fate upon one another in attempt to undermine That we do not offer to each others thirst a glass of wine." Jeff, this last part caught me in the truth of it has for all times. It seemed a statement apart from the story of the poem, yet gave me the intention. Wonderful writing! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ravenwolfvoyager, I, too, enjoyed this very much. Left in awe... Sadelite |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gah-lee...wow |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeff~ WOW !!! The all of this is compelling~ 'I hear birds of prey overhead cutting the wind like knives' Oh my ... know that flock too, too well~ I am so enjoying reading you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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