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new life |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden 
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A new life begins Filled with shades of dought Life makes them cautious They exist to chance No promises are made He walks into her life Totally by chance Never to look back Her heart tells you not to worry A comforting passion of feeling Love is all they have Years of yearning and pain They make their way through Rewards of time They both not know A life of promise Hope runs strong Two souls as one |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I liked it and I like the way you write. Can I first suggest spell checking your words. dought was I think doubt Parts grip by the emotions others seem to walk in Line by line is ok but you can heighten the impact by looking at the natural grouping I'm not a great one for formal format myself but I personally find that I can use structure to enhance the words I liked the poem dave |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
Thanks for the comments. I have always been bad at spelling. Im still new at this. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 Ten years is a long time...but I do not believe that it was chance...it was supposed to happen and I am grateful it did. ILY. "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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