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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Come 3 AM And half the flowers are stark In the black white dim And I Finger softly the edges Of phrase you left in mind With such an easy graceful Slip of vowels… An “a” held half beat longer Than staccato And two beats shorter than a drawl They flowed across your tongue Until I was caught in the currents Pulling me From this someplace I was Ten minutes ago To the place I spin in now I still turn my head And look When I smell that scent Wondering if it is you Knowing it is not You’re back in his world Trying to laugh Attempting to find acceptance Without denial And this skyline Is now dark With the other half of the flowers Fading in coming dawn But tell me Was the taste of it That one night Enough? |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
Does the question need to be answered? Great write, a good reading experience. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done Captain.. Enjoyed the thoughts behind this.. and to answer your question..."Is it ever?" ~Morning hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Warning!! *moth on the computer*  Attempting to find acceptance Without denial ======================= Is there such a thing? Like the water...your words haunt me lovely. Nature poets can't walk across the backyard without tripping over an epiphany. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, A sad write but a good read. Enjoyed |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
It never is! Are you making 'fun' of the way we talk? Huggles Ron, Marti |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To answer the question on behalf of the reader? NO! Smiling...your tenderness in passing thoughts such as these is always apparent, and always touching... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling and nodding with Jan--but--I think it best to include the preceding line: Trying to laugh Attempting to find acceptance Without denial Yep, we know this place, don't we m'twin? stretching and smiling, it's soooooooo good to wake up to you! whoever she is, she's a damned fool. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
De-ja-vu in between Realities and fantasies... I imagine the only rationalization might be that this human experience would be too monotone without such haunts... This stanza especially: I still turn my head And look When I smell that scent Wondering if it is you Knowing it is not Full of relate and rich with your style, Ron... very nice write. -MVS You CAN make a difference: http://educate-yourself.org/ |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very cool write Ron, and methinks on nights like those, one is never enough. Jason |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Coffee and Capt. Ron...it's a good morning.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...Sensitive and endearing, this is. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is lovely...always a mood when I read you, though I can't place what it is |
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richard taylor Member
since 2004-01-13
Posts 136 |
Hi, This is very well done much thought went into the poem I enjoyed it. regards Richard. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ron, this is simply a step beyond....beautiful stuff. And this "I still turn my head And look When I smell that scent Wondering if it is you Knowing it is not" ...took me to a very special place indeed. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You write what I'm going to call 'relax' poetry...your words are soothing, your delivery is soft and sexy..I feel like I need a cigarette.  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I still turn my head And look When I smell that scent Wondering if it is you Knowing it is not" The power of scent...I do know this. And this is yet another I missed...and I am glad I went searching...this one I save. "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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