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Tapping Rain (20-less) |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Echoing walls -- rain-drops tap the river sound traces trees I sit silently the rippling chant-- moves mountains ~*~ In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes art [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-15-2004 06:08 PM).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is lovely, Lauren! Soothing and relaxing too! |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
this is a very relaxing poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I agree with loner. A gentle write from a gentle poet. lovely Lauren. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Lauren..very serene. Love ya lady! Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
....only as you can Lauren....hugs, Chris  "When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You know |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
It does indeed as this write moves souls Greeneyes. |
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LiquidMidnight Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 50 |
I enjoyed this very much. Many times when writers use unorthodox spacing in their works, it sounds very choppy. (I know sometimes that's their intention. But sometimes I just think it sounds to choppy) This has unorthodox spacing and it flows very well. I really liked the imagery of this work. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I pictured a heavy rain springing from a misty spray, each drop gathering .... gathering each other, gathering time ... and as the downfall continues and water rises, the river grows, taking the banks with it .... only the beginning for the mountains follow. Such a short piece but much said. Somedays I wish I could move mountains so easily .... then I realize, I don't have the time. *S oxox |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, I also feel a calming and peaceful feeling from this poem. Huggggssss, my friend :heart Ethel |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
The way I understood this, it was the contrast of something relaxing that was capable of moving mountains -- what an ingenious write! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
in awe |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
"the rippling chant moves mountains" truly a nugget of wisdom... |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I love to sit quiet, and hear the rain. Jason |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Love the rain, especially on a tin roof! Your words paint a lovely calm. McLean |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
ethereal mystical images, really nice one ~C |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (kiss on cheek) Awwwwwww, I just love your surreal imagery as always, sweet friend, I believe all these melodies can literally melt the hearts of the mountains, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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