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Listening to my Pencil
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Listening to my Pencil |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Listening to my Pencil You are indigo you are blue wrap the sun in color you In the fabric of the night an owl lingers rolling eyes around a single whisper found Circles circles blessed be in wrap of time never free Teeter totter child life kissed the heavy part is pain the light is bliss In the middle where you sit a child remembers pain got off and it was bliss in place high all around that was sent down heavy on the ground You would rather hold the heavy place alone the seat on top empty replaced with stone than hit the ground so hard again A sin? So many truths light up then dim and all the pretty things within change charge drain and fill to empty once again I am just a traveler looking for a home, finding I carry it around with me, and sometimes it's just too heavy. [This message has been edited by Martie (01-15-2004 10:13 AM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh, I've been in those seats...the top whiplash and the bottom crash when the weights were so uneven... I'm glad you decided to post this. It moved me at the first brush and it moves me now. Good to see you back, dear lady. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Kristin Eve Member
since 2004-01-13
Posts 89On, Canada |
This is a really interesting and thought-provoking poem. I love the analogy here. "Who you are speaks so loudly...I can hardly hear what you are saying" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
in awe of you |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Very thought provoking. I think I am going to go feel empty for a while.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your pencil whispers loudly to the heart. Well done, m'friend. I've missed you! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice work Martie... always enjoy your offerings.. they indeed are always a treat |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent piece here Martie. Very much enjoyed dear lady. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
You pencil sketches such a beautiful balance of light and shadow neither side priveleged...only Truth ~C |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"So many truths light up then dim and all the pretty things within change charge drain and fill to empty once again" Very nice Martie!  "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Poems like this feed my soul, and I woke up hungry...now I am sate... enjoyed very much your sparse use of language , yet never leaving a puzzle anywhere in the poem....:-) _______ice ><> |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
This is a great write, Marti. I really enjoy your work! McLean |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You would rather hold the heavy place alone the seat on top empty replaced with stone than hit the ground so hard again Is your pencil whispering my life to you? *S* Excellent write... PIP isn't the same without you... welcome back! *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Sometimes I read you with a tear in this eye Sometimes I read you with a heartfelt *sigh* This time ... both~ Love you ... love this ... love you again~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
"...fill to empty...." That image is going to be with me for a long, long time. I too know that less-than-empty, though I'm much less familiar with it than you have been. If I could change that, I would. |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Wonderful piece! Sometimes I come here looking for inspiration......And that I have found. Words are my medicine. Read and live and love and heal! molti benedizione (many blessings) always Eno |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You are indigo you are blue wrap the sun in color you In the fabric of the night an owl lingers rolling eyes around a single whisper found ========================= the moth learned a long time ago to listen to your pencil...to read between your lines...and to learn from your gifted writing. Nature poets can't walk across the backyard without tripping over an epiphany. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - a powerful look inside leading to ponderous thoughts and feelings - this reall digs deeply and says so much - as usual your poetry wraps my soul and takes me on powerful journeys - Paul |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, I too am always enthralled by your gorgeous language and voice, yay! (kiss on cheek) You always keep an ear to the melodies of life, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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