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2writeis2be Junior Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 45Live in London, but from TX |
A million light years away I feel Spaced out Literally Being pulled forced onward backward Gravity rejecting me The closer I want to be The more distant I become Merging with Detracting from My goal Which is momentarily Unknown [This message has been edited by 2writeis2be (01-15-2004 07:50 AM).] |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
That is true but you have the initiative to be there. A very enjoyable read! Thank you. |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Again, I see where you're going with your post,,,,,,but, needs a lil punctuation,, The closer I want to be the More distant I become The closer I want to be.... The more distant I become. Just a suggestion,,,,,, Take Care Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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2writeis2be Junior Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 45Live in London, but from TX |
i took that hint--thanx  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
very interesting write this is. i love the play with words, and how you built each sentence off from the next. I look forward to reading more from you. take care, Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I enjoyed this very clever writing. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you and me both |
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