Open Poetry #30 |
From Hollywood |
nothing Junior Member
since 2004-01-10
Posts 23Northumberland, UK |
Picture if you will, a street, The American West perhaps or An English country village Vibrant with sound and colour Voices, faces, moving spaces where Scents of spices or dice dance fitfully. This is what you see when you see me. Draw back the view, focus, focus, Whitewashed buildings and tavern signs Creaking as the doors slam Normal people, humdrum lives Drinking husbands, gossiping wives That’s what your eyes tell you When you see me. Though perhaps, if you knew where to look Light could glint off a lens or A man in overalls appear, somewhere near Or maybe you could peer around a wall And find just wooden beams all angular And beyond, the baking desert. Look down my street, can you see The smiles on faces as lives go by? Can you believe a film Forget that it’s not real, immersed In the illusion, can you believe Me? |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Very visual and an interesting parallel between film and persona. I enjoyed the thoughts and descriptions in this "treatment". -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
nothing Had the same response as Mark. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I diasgree with the words before because none of them I feel took the time to do more than look in the shop window The first image is looking at a window and saying, quaint, ethnic, how nice. The second is banal destroying all but those who come to breed and die. The third is looking past the facade. These words deserved more. Dave |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Normal people, humdrum lives Drinking husbands, gossiping wives That’s what your eyes tell you When you see me." OK. From your lips to god's ear. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! |
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