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Lonely Dance extended |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I wrote the the first verse of Lonely Dance as an idea on the Open Scroll Tag. Lynn who I have unfortunately lost contact with then replied with a verse and over a month and a quarter we wrote alternative verses, the poem being very down to earth. The rest of the verses wouldn't have happened without Lynn who is very talented. I can't give details about Lynn in this day and age but without her something that at times was a bit near the knuckle wouldn't have happened. Someone commented on Lonely Dance that they would have liked the name of the Supermarket. I wonder whether they would say the same with the original words plus extended version. ************************************************** Lonely Dance Revisited In the supermarket we danced Back and forwards in our song Of failed romance Challenging our courage and turning circle Hesitating in anguish lost We passed our dreams and desires Dreaming of you with blood red meat Feeling for you in dark brown coffee Words sprung amongst the batteries Disappeared amongst the beer We danced the dance of baskets The tango of trollies Hiding our eyes Avoiding our tongues To speak in passing In the street we danced Your short skirt and my long coat In our eyes we spoke Nothing but desire In the night we danced Heating our bones Desiring bare nothings Wrestling alone Whilst our minds lived In the real world of our selves In your earthy look You took the time to register for me A money saving offer To my lust and my cost A time for ourselves cut from the bargain hunters Stopped by early closing We trembled to crescendo I bought beyond any means to delay the departure But the cashier closed With a smile A Major leap for mankind In the way we loved Without needing to Touching your eyes With faint images of frozen delight To whisper blown air For our delight Until we dance again On rainbows we danced remebering all the colors of our love charmed by the neon green and the breathtaking view of how it all could have turned out. Slipping down to the end of a fairy dream caught inside a Hans Christen Anderson tale you were Cinderella and I the prince twirling around in magic but like it always does the clock struck 12 and it was over leaving us refeashed and longing for more till we could dance again... until we could. Echoing light to household Poster beds queued pumping Laser beams to drift gently Echoing puff pastry To our honeymoon ideal In toneless music We switched chariots Yours with steel Mine with mushrooms And we have until 4.00 4.00 we have only to cook Ourselves We danced in the fire we felt its flames lick our scorched skin we dined with dainty blue china drinking the heat from tea kettle We moved in one accord we drifted through a dream we lived we loved we fought we cried we danced we danced the dance of love and life. Now all we dance is memories and dreams But we still dance. We danced in the fire we felt its flames lick our scorched skin we dined with dainty blue china drinking the heat from tea kettle We moved in one accord we drifted through a dream we lived we loved we fought we cried we danced we danced the dance of love and life. Now all we dance is memories and dreams But still we dance. 6 We danced on heated coffee We licked melted cream We wildly swept the table We upset all we seemed We splinted cups of coffee Pastries to unknown We made ourselves fools So we could be at home We failed at all we did And thus began anew We screwed up Everyone but ourselves Your kiss was just brand new If our dreams We loved In our tries We are a mess But maybe tomorrow We wont be second best Our glances hit 500(degrees) as if we were baked roast pie we forgot about everything we made choices unwise tho it didnt seem so at the time love ran out of rhyme we tasted every flavor of skittles nipping at the one in your shirt the one from your finger tips the one still wet from your kiss. We did what we thought right afterwards how we did fight We were wrong You were the light then you, my dream, I lost sight destruction went from love to might. The only table heated that night Was the one we sat behind We never left the onlookers Firey thoughts admired We didn't go for love We were just on fire Chucking down our water Every choice unwise Ours seem stupid We foul everthing we try Like rubberlooking for cupid We pay the garage for every sty Love never ran We never got that way The stock market loved today Branded "stocklover cupid" to our ass We bowled each other over Ripping at our shirts I left my wallet behind again You supplied the dirt The grim reaper stole cupids arrow the was supposed to hit you and me making us sorry that we should ever be but it didnt quite work that way and we cant forget we remember everyday the fire that lite in your eyes the way I fit you I was the exact size we dream about what could have been and then we recall when you kissed me for the first time when I tried my first pick up line we laughed over what I said your gorgeous eyes would glow with you in my bed shared memories and dreams that lie the innocent way you look when u cry the generous side you showed to me back when we were free now we just wrestle with what ifs caking dried mud in sore wounds. I found you electric in the batteries I lost you in the beer Grim Reaper was on discount The store was growing near He fied his arrow into my heart Speared my Amex too I supposed that mattered more to me I'd lost more than you I've never been sorry We screwed everything we tried Up against the wall, cashier desk, your hide Fire flaming from your mouth My cards went up in smoke Now we have asbestos bags And underwear to coach You were the perfect pitch We laid roads by the mile Burnt them in an instance We were the style Incandescent we shared memories and dreams that lie Putting out my fire with your tears There we lied In innocense I took you In love I came back Never any capture Just the cactus that you lacked I always applied the mud To salve your every dream I never could be more Than below Your best dreams maybe we went about it all wrong this lonely dance without a song I`m afraid to ask I`m scared to try so I just stare blankly to the sky in awe and wondering as I often am about you coz I lost more then you too your were the last file the last paper on my desk I kept puttin you off but now I`ve no more room to shelf your memory inside me its waging its war leaving me realzing I know I want more more heartache and tears if thats at its best just for the chance to test and to try to face all my fears to love you once more if you can deal with the thought of me by your side maybe this time we can do it all differantly? How did we go about this lonely song We danced poetry Without words We didn’t fail We didn’t know how to succeed In the time to learn and understand We destroyed the understanding We lost nothing We were too afraid to venture We filled up our memories With visions of wonder Dancing on neon green rainbows We changed the colour to yellow There was never a fear of you by my side Only the fear I had to catch you first How could I trap an untamed freedom loving spirit Tie her down to tamed delights Blown on central heating Across old matted sofas That yearned passion from the mounded springs There walls yelled sex I yelled quietly What had I bought a coffee table Tying you to me Destroyed you and we tried In the danger, in the chase, in space We lived In comfort We died |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I know about the mispellings and everything but in fairness I have put this with all it's mistakes as we wrote it across the internet. Dave |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Dave, This was long, and i usually don't read longer work, but it was worth it. Your imagery was so rich, i felt i was a little mouse in the background watching all this go by. Enjoyed. ~Sadelite~ "We laid roads by the mile Burnt them in an instance" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
wow, is all I can say, a grieving heart speaks volumns...this was astounding |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I know it is a long poem and a long read Thanks for taking the time to read it and comment Much appreciated Dave |
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