navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #30 » The wasteland (part 4)
Open Poetry #30
Post A Reply Post New Topic The wasteland (part 4) Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-11-26 01:51 PM


(The first 3 parts here /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=82&topic=003505

iv

Dreams


At the end of each gray sameness

She sleeps
In the masters bed
A rough pallet of unkempt emotion

She lies
In restive repose
Seeking solace

In dreams
Where she is a princess

A band of braided prayer
Studded with sparkled pleas
Is her diadem

Once again pristine
Gone, are the scars that mar  
Her small plague of hurts
Gone

Dreams
In which she dances

Alone in the great hall
Of all that might have been
Tapestried in panels
Woven of wishes

Dancing
Through the clatter of bones
Left by those
That sought her deliverance

Paper-white ossuary gourds
Roll about,
Then stare with muted mocking
Through empty sockets
And lipless grins

Her light glide and pirouette
Give way to feverish whirling
And frenetic flail

Dizzying herself
In celebration of a freedom
Merely guessed at

Breathless and spent
She gathers the rubble together
And settles herself to sleep
Into the nest of bones
To drift away once more

Into that same gray sameness


"In looking Northward, I see a light"



[This message has been edited by wranx (11-26-2003 01:54 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 E.F.Rose - All Rights Reserved
disc22
New Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 8
lancs, england
1 posted 2003-11-26 02:05 PM


wow,
some really dark lines here,
"Dancing
Through the clatter of bones"

"Then stare with muted mocking
Through empty sockets
And lipless grins"

love it...
will read the remainder...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2003-11-26 02:24 PM


wranx,
A literate delight to read. Have a happy thanksgiving.


Sadelite
Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519

3 posted 2003-11-26 02:40 PM


wranx,
   This is absolutely beautiful.  I'd like to earmark this one for my library.   Each time I read it I saw more and more.   Quite beautiful, full of imagery and promise.  
                            Sadelite

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

4 posted 2003-11-26 03:33 PM


You know how much I love this Bro.

Keeping it.

Dark Sis

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Duncan
Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

5 posted 2003-11-26 03:44 PM


"She lies
In restive repose
Seeking solace

In dreams
Where she is a princess

A band of braided prayer
Studded with sparkled pleas
Is her diadem"

and

"Dizzying herself
In celebration of a freedom
Merely guessed at

Breathless and spent
She gathers the rubble together
And settles herself to sleep
Into the nest of bones
To drift away once more

Into that same gray sameness"

Ed, as always, the further I read...the more I find myself grateful that you didn't take up bowling instead.  
BTW...if you have a twin in PA, I met him.  Shoulda seen the look on my face when he said he owned a bookstore.  (Insert twilight zone music here)



[This message has been edited by Duncan (11-26-2003 03:48 PM).]

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
6 posted 2003-11-26 03:58 PM


She sleeps
In the masters bed
A rough pallet of unkempt emotion

She lies
In restive repose
Seeking solace

In dreams
Where she is a princess

A band of braided prayer
Studded with sparkled pleas
Is her diadem

Once again pristine
Gone, are the scars that mar  
Her small plague of hurts
Gone

~*~

This kept me.
The rest of it held me.

xmutexelationx
Junior Member
since 2003-05-16
Posts 15
AmongstTheCharredFieldsOfSnow
7 posted 2003-11-27 08:49 PM


"Paper-white ossuary gourds
Roll about,
Then stare with muted mocking
Through empty sockets
And lipless grins"
(my favorite part)

I don't know if you remember me, but I sure remember you.  This is Sara.. (poeticgoddessofdepression) i'm back at passions now, I figured I'd check up on you and a few others before I started posting again.  I loved this piece, though.  It's beautiful- as are the other three.  I adore your talent.  Take care.

wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
8 posted 2003-11-27 09:49 PM


Thanks for read friends.

And Duncan? I just have one of those faces...seems I have a twin here in my area as well. Haven't met the fella, but his name is "Mike", and from all I've heard, he's not the nicest of human beings. (Now I have to worry bout maybe paying for transgressions that I've not enjoyed...hehe)


Hi Sara! I certainly do remember you. Happy you're back posting, can't wait to see how your writing has grown *smile*

Really, it's nice to see ya!

Ed...

[This message has been edited by wranx (11-27-2003 10:16 PM).]

brian sites
Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
9 posted 2003-11-27 10:18 PM


left by those
who sought her deliverance

yes...
it is upheld
me bro

very nice

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
10 posted 2003-11-28 12:48 PM


her sins mocking . . .
as she opens her eyes
to what she thought
was a reality
only to be
reality

you are brilliant
please keep going . . .

you know I am waiting
for the next . . .

day?
hour?
minute?
of this . . .

xxoo

Ratleader
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass
11 posted 2003-11-28 10:13 AM


Great stuff here, Ed -- keep on rollin' out that red carpet!

Ed

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Jason Lyle
Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438
With my darkling
12 posted 2003-11-28 03:56 PM


Enjoyed, as always Ed, do you write any bad ones?

Jason

Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
13 posted 2003-11-30 09:22 PM


Ed...Amazing!
vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
14 posted 2003-12-01 05:57 PM



Ed?...I am truly enjoying this story...

You, my friend, are absolutely amazing.

Hugs, you...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Ratleader
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass
15 posted 2004-01-18 10:28 AM


I miss you, Ed

Ed

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
16 posted 2004-01-18 10:53 AM


Exceptional write ....
hope you are dancing in beautiful realms of love.
Love, Margherita

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #30 » The wasteland (part 4)

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary